English 301 Revised Document Rubric Revised by: Dana Malhas Revision for: Mechelle Haines

Absent or Below Basic

Thesis is unidentifiable or does not respond the prompt.

Developing
Thesis fits the prompt, is identifiable but vague, too broad, or unrelated to the document's paragraphs.

Proficient

Advanced

Focus

Thesis fits the prompt and is clear and specific. Thesis fits the prompt and is Blog and Persuasive thesis takes a position. Profile clear and specific. Blog and thesis reports. Persuasive texts' theses take a position that is legitimately arguable and insightful. Profile thesis offers a complex report on the chosen topic. Essay maintains consistent and adequate connection to the thesis. Essay maintains a connection to thesis with style.

Essay has no coherent focal point.

Essay is not consistently or adequately linked to the thesis. Tone is often inconsistent or suggests misreading of the document's audience. Generally uses appropriate design that conforms to the genre's conventions. Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors impede readability or otherwise distract from meaning.

Tone usually suggests an absence of audience awareness. Design usually does not conform to the genre's conventions.

Usually employs appropriate tone and language for Employs sophisticated tone and the appropriate audience. language for the appropriate audience. Appropriate design conforms to the genre's Engaging design conforms to conventions. genre's conventions. Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors are Outstanding control of few and do not distract from meaning. language, including effective diction and sentence variety.

Readability & Style

Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors impede readability.

Omits or uses incorrectly MLA- or APA-style parenthetical citations, quotation marks, and works cited list. Drops quotations and ideas into text without introducing source.

A few errors in MLA- or APAstyle parenthetical citations, quotation marks, and works cited list. Often includes sources names without introduction.

Correctly uses MLA- or APA-style parenthetical citations, quotation marks, and works cited list. Usually introduces each source fullyyou know who did the research or talking, for whom, and why.

Correctly uses MLA- or APAstyle parenthetical citations, quotation marks, and works cited list. Introduces each source fullyyou know who did the research or talking, for whom, and why.

Ideas not explained.

Typically explains concepts.

Develops concepts coherently.

Develops concepts with sophistication and creativity. Supports the thesis and paragraph claims with wellselected and thoroughly, insightfully analyzed evidence. Effectively ordered, unified paragraphs are sequenced effectively and seamlessly.

Analysis and Organization

Inadequate, inappropriate, or irrelevant evidence.

Over uses or under-analyzes evidence.

Supports the thesis and paragraph claims with credible, relevant, analyzed evidence.

Unorganized: difficult to find relationships between Demonstrates some signs of Effectively ordered, unified paragraphs are paragraphs or sentences. organization, but occassionally generally linked with useful transitions. includes abrupt or illogical shifts and ineffective sequence of ideas.

My criticism: You really need to strengthen your thesis. I can see where your thesis statement is saying but overall it can be stronger. You need to be clearer in your transitions from body paragraph to body paragraph. You need to pay attention to citing your sources more often. I noticed many sentences provided lots of information but there was no in-text citation included. Your paper has good structure and an interesting topic. All you really need to focus on is strengthening your thesis statement, citations, and paragraph transitions.