Dear Ms.

Ehrlich,
This semester was probably the busiest, yet, the most productive
semester Ive ever had throughout the high school. I feel like I wrote lifetime
worth of essays because of all the college admission and scholarship essays
addition to this class. Thinking back, I have never practiced writing as much
as I did this year. Although it was a busy semester, this class has helped me
prepare for the college admission essays ahead of time.
1. Awareness of strategies writers use in different contexts
Although my college admission essay didnt have strong impact, I feel like
I used an appropriate nuance for the audience to read. I used the formal tone
to tell my story about adapting to a new country and culture. Toward the end,
I used a persuasive tone to deliver an idea that I will likely to overcome any
hardships. Whereas, for my first major paper, I used the formal tone to
express the professionalism. For the college essay, I tried to appeal my
strength; for the first major paper, I appeal my expertise in social norms.
2. Read, analyze, and synthesize multiple types of evidence
I used several of different resources to support my ideaa strong
backbone to my essay. Using a quotation alone cannot become a strong
evidence. Evidence exists because my opinion is present. In order to use
evidence efficiently, I have analyzed and explained the details of the
evidence. In the past, I have experienced my essay turning into an exact
essay that the author wrote. To prevent such situation, I made sure I included
my own idea in between the essays.
3. Produce complex arguments that matter in academic contexts
The issue that is presented in the essays are difficult to solve. Theres no
such answer that can solve the issue completely. There are choices that are
better than the other, but there is no right or wrong answer. My second major
paper argues about how transplant such as savior sibling is considered
unethical, but the concept of it is very clever, thus, this method should be
performed only when the parents are responsible enough to take care of the
savior sibling the same way. The essay includes both sides of the argument.
Each of the body paragraphs hold different options for the transplantation.
4. Revision, editing, and proofreading
The first draft of a college admission essay was just a bunch of thoughts
jumbled up together. There were some sentences that seemed gibberish, so I
revised the essays overall. After the revision, my ideas that are presented in
the essay are clearer and more effective in a sense that my body paragraphs
are balanced. Moreover, we, as a class, had a time to get our essays

proofread by each other. I responded to the feedbacks by trying my best to

correct the mistakes. I knew that I made many grammar mistakes, therefore,
I got my essay proofread by you and my counselor who has better English
proficiency than I do after I have proofread it myself.