Imrovements for Audrey

1.1

whos there
situated well
17th centruery good
locating where it is was good
midnightwhats the effect
nothing has happnedwhat is the effect
*nervous undertainty
tension and forshadowin
um wait
imagery of hearing
o hearing to distinct each other
a lot of questions
o good link to uncertainty and fear of unknown
doubting example good
pathetic fallacy?
Short sentences
Ghost the thing
o What is the effect of the thing
o Good explanation of effect
Audience placed in position of action so audience is aware its going to
happen

1.2
1.2

O that this too too solid flesh would melt

Introdution almost too long? 1 minute 20
Imagery
o Garden
Order discipline beauty higher class
Where is it found in the play
Ghost: when I was sitting in my orchard I was stung by
an
o Rank and gross
Disgunting
Savage?
Hyperole
Classical allusion
o Comparison
o Strong image
o Shows the contraat
o What did niobe do?
Unhumanness?

2.2

Doesnt compare to beast

I have of late
Aweseome thesesi
Turmoildramatci language and comparisons
Dab signposting
Dramatic language
o More melancholic
o Link to thesis good
o Point about globe not very cleae
o Link to thesis very good
Shift from dramatic to comparisons was good

The importance of language is explored through tone and explanation of bad

techniques
2.2
3.1
3.3
3.3
3.4

Closet scene
Ah shit
My tesis isis not needed
Relationship through pace and tension and parallelism
Parralelism
o Parallelism mocks and insluts mother
o Showsconflict and decrease in relationship
Started in wrong order
Pace
o Short sentences
o Forshadows
o Builds tension
o Tension builds to poloniius murder
o Some stuff doesnt seem relevant to pace
o Need more text support
Queen I shelpless? Not logical under headings

3.4
4.4
5.1
emotionality