English 360 Portfolio Rubric for Revised Documents

Form: Design

Absent or
Below Basic
Figures or formatting do not
match the papers purpose or
are not explained by author.

Developing

Proficient

Advanced

Some figures and formatting help

author achieve purpose.

Designincluding figures and

formathelps author achieve
purpose.

Designincluding figures and

formathelps author achieve
purpose with style.

Form: Genre

Generic conventions are not

employed.

Follows most generic conventions

(whether for instruction manual,
cover letter, etc.)

Follows generic conventions

(whether for instruction manual,
cover letter, etc.).

Follows generic conventions

(whether for instruction
manual, cover letter, etc.)
consistently and with
sophistication.

Content:
Information

Fails to provide most of the

required information.

Supplies some necessary

information.

Supplies all necessary

information.

Content:
Support

Typically does not support

claims with evidence.
Sometimes tries to support
claims with additional claims or
personal opinion.
Frequently unorganized:
difficult to find a clear
relationship between
paragraphs or sentences.
Headings are inappropriate,
unclear or absent.

Supports a few claims with

evidence, although the evidence
could at times be more specific or
relevant.

Supports most claims with

specific, relevant details and/or
evidence.

Supplies all necessary

information with
sophistication.
Supports all claims with
specific, relevant details and/or
evidence. Employs different
types of evidence.

Demonstrates some signs of

organization, but occasionally
includes abrupt or illogical shifts
and ineffective sequence of ideas.
Headings may not be appropriate
or clear.

Citations:

Omits or uses incorrectly

MLA- or APA-style
parenthetical citations,
quotation marks, and works
cited list. Drops quotations and
ideas into text without
introducing source.

A few errors in MLA- or APAstyle parenthetical citations,

quotation marks, and works cited
list. Often includes sources names
without introduction.

Effectively ordered paragraphs

generally cover only one topic
each and are linked with useful
transitions. Headings are usually
appropriate and clear.
Sentences typically flow
logically.
Correctly uses MLA- or APAstyle parenthetical citations,
quotation marks, and works cited
list. Usually introduces each
source fullyyou know who did
the research or talking, for
whom, and why.

Effectively ordered paragraphs

cover only one topic each and
are generally linked with
useful transitions. Headings
are appropriate and clear.
Sentences flow logically to
persuade reader.
Correctly uses MLA- or APAstyle parenthetical citations,
quotation marks, and works
cited list. Introduces each
source fullyyou know who
did the research or talking, for
whom, and why.

Readability:

Spelling, syntax, diction, or

punctuation errors impede
readability.

Spelling, syntax, diction, or

punctuation errors impede
readability or otherwise distract
from meaning.

Spelling, syntax, diction, or

punctuation errors are few and
do not distract from meaning.

Outstanding control of
language, including effective
diction and sentence variety.

Content:
Organization

Comments: On what two or three areas do you think this writer needs to focus before submitting this document?

English 360 Portfolio Rubric for Revised Documents

The best quality about this resume is that all the information that an employer would need is on the document. However, the way we present information is just as
important what we present, and this resume can be much improved if we bring consistency to the design, formatting and verb usage. Youll notice that the low scores were mostly
given in the areas of design and readability, but if these sections were improved, it would automatically boost the other criteria as well. The first suggestion I would have is to
move the Education section right underneath the objective. Firstly because you mention college in your objective, so it would be an improvement in consistency. Second, most
jobs are interested in level of education, so you want to make it well known that you are a college level student. This will help prevent your resume ending up in the maybe pile
versus hired.
Once you move the Education section, the next thing would be to work on revising your bullet points. If you notice the bullets under Irwindale Public Works, the first bullet
reads Mentored younger workers which is great. The next bullet though, Giving proper instruction automatically becomes awkward because of the verb tense change.
Youll want to revise the bullets to include uniformity, just like we did in the iFixit guides.
Speaking of uniformity, youll want to take out some bullets to make your resume seem less cluttered. This will create more white space and make your resume seem less busy.
Change some of the headers to make things pop out more, and with the addition of white space things will be more distinct. The fonts are too similar in size, so youll want to
maybe use bigger font differences, and also some underlines. And finally, spell check. Unless your work name is actually purposely misspelled Rennaissance versus
Renaissance, the resume will end up immediately (in most cases) in the do not hire pile. Overall, some more revision and subtracting of some repetitive detail will make this
a solid resume.
For: Luis Delgado
By: Jay-Ram Rajendra

English 360 Portfolio Rubric for Revised Documents