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CREATION
Writing Process
The shadows grew long in the town of Dry
Creek, as the afternoon sun crept sleepily
towards the horizon. There was never any sign
of life at this time of day, with humans and
animals alike withdrawing from the inescapable
Australian mid-summer heat. The few
monotonous town buildings sat straight-edged
and lifeless, unremarkable against the desolate
landscape.
Adverb: Sleepily
Noun group: the
inescapable Australian
mid-summer heat
Adjective: desolate
creates imagery
Juxtaposing describing
adjectives: brilliant,
lazyhard-working
Cultural
reference/metaphor: tall
poppies
Antonym: Huge fortune
little respect
Exclamation: Indicates
high emotion/hopefulness
Synonym/Adjective:
Changed from dirtiest to
filthiest
Humour: Reminder of
Jimmys drunken state
Personification:
Unforgiving sun
Imagery: drumming
Repetition/Parallelism:
Disappear
Simile (imagery):
dropped like a weight
Symbolism: Motion of the
dust reflects Williams path
to happiness
Analysis
Setting
The physical setting of this narrative is established within the opening
lines of the story. We wanted to convey the image of a typical rural
Australian town through use of descriptive noun groups such as the
inescapable Australian mid-summer heat, and descriptive adjectives such
as monotonous, straight-edged, lifeless and unremarkable to describe
the town buildings. We described the landscape as desolate, as we
wanted the reader to gain a sense of the isolation of this town, which
would then be reflected within the protagonist. We experimented with
different names for the town, but felt that Dry Creek best captured the
Australian outback image we were going for. We made use of characters
names, language, occupations and backstories to establish that the story
is set in the nineteenth century. We also achieved this by referencing
historical events, such as the Gold Rush.
Characterisation
The story is written from a third person perspective, as we wanted to put
forward multiple characters points of view. William becomes the main
protagonist, however the omnipresent narrator gives insight into the
thoughts, feelings, behaviours and personalities of Lou the bartender and
Jimmy the drover. We gave our characters both positive and negative
human qualities, as we wanted our characters to be dynamic and
relatable. For example, Lou the bartender is established as non-judgmental
and accepting of peoples flaws, but then ignores William in his bar.
William is portrayed as someone who is misunderstood and to be
empathized with, but then becomes the aggressor in the conflict. Jimmy is
given the juxtaposition of being a womanizer but also a brilliant cricketer.
We initially planned for William to live up to his reputation as being
arrogant due to his wealth. However, we then decided that the conflicting
traits within each character make them more three dimensional, creating
further interest, as the reader must make a decision about who to
empathise with (McDonald 2013).
Plot Structure
Our narrative follows an orientation-complication-resolution structure
(Derewianka & Jones 2012), as we felt it aided in the development of our
characters and the setting in which they live. The orientation phase sets
the context for the complication to arise by giving character backgrounds
and anecdotes. These provide the reader with a deeper understanding of
why the characters behave and react in the way they do during the
complication. The event in the complication stage sets off a chain of
responses that lead to a change of setting from the bar to the street. We
decided that we wanted our narrative to have a definite resolution, and
experimented with different ways of achieving this before settling on an
insightful realization on the part of the protagonist. We experimented with
a coda at the end, but felt that it took away from the intensity of the
resolution.
Style
We utilized a number of literary stylistic techniques in this narrative to
enhance the setting, characterization, plot and themes of the story. For
example, we used description through metaphors and similes to paint a
certain image in the readers mind. For example the ball dropped like a
weight from his hand is a simile that was intended to emphasise the
gravity and suddenness of Williams epiphany that he must leave the
town. We also personified the sun throughout the entire narrative, in
saying that it crept sleepily or was unforgiving. This was intended to
enhance the image of the typical Australian outback setting. We used
Australian slang in character dialogue, such as Whadya say, ease off,
go on mate and you scallywags, to maintain the integrity of the setting
in terms of where and when the story is set. We also attempted to use
some humour in the narrators voice, such as in the description of Jimmy
the drover as having a reputation as a brilliant but lazy cricketer and a
hard working womanizer.
Dialogue
We decided to take a less-is-more approach to dialogue, and included a
lot of description of body language and character reactions to enhance the
readers understanding of the relationships between the characters. For
example, Jimmys scoff of derision in response to Lous question, allows
the reader insight into Jimmys personality and creates the feeling of
comfortableness between Jimmy and Lou. Conversely, Lous silence
towards William, and the action of pouring Williams drink into the
filthiest glass, gives a stronger portrayal of his feelings towards William
than any dialogue could. In making Williams request for a drink an
exclamation, we wanted to emphasise his hopefulness for an amicable
exchange with the men in the bar, as we felt that this makes the reader
more sympathetic towards him when the other characters respond by
ignoring him.
Strategies
Purpose
- Consider:
- How has the author used illustrations to create or enhance the
setting?
- Does the setting affect the events of the plot?
Strategy Four - Character Development Through Noun Groups
- Discuss understanding of protagonists, antagonist and focaliser
characters in narratives.
- Develop and change noun groups to improve characterization and
description.