April 24, 2016

Dear Ms. Holt,

I read all 256 pages of the book, Confessions of a Not It Girl. This is a love story
of a girl named Jan whos in love with a guy at her school whose name was Josh. She
faces some hard decisions to make that include other people, and decisions she has to
make that shes causing herself. To try to get closer to Josh, she babysits him and his
little siblings.
Jan is the type of girl who not only crushes on a guy, but goes crazy over them.
On page 78 it describes how Jan gets ready for Josh to kiss her. She opens her mouth
and puckers her lip but surprise! No kiss. This means that Josh doesnt like her back
and doesnt want her. This can play out in two ways for Jan; either she keeps chasing
after him or stops liking him. This reminds me of the book, Romeo and Juliet. Juliet
expects a kiss from Romeo but doesnt get it.
Jan faces more things in life thats more important than her love life, but also her
future. Throughout pages 142-148, it explains how she is putting Josh before herself
like missing application deadlines. This shows how she has to decide whats more
important and she chose Josh. This reminds me of like how when you want to buys
something and you have to decide whether its a want or a need and necessity to life.

Sincerely,
Jeab Aquino
Rubric rating submitted on: 5/5/2016, 10:17:59 AM by bholt@ggusd.net

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Rubric rating submitted on: 5/5/2016, 10:20:12 AM by bholt@ggusd.net

5

Introductory
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Exceptional
introduction
for audience
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purpose.
Includes
properly
punctuated
book title
and a
summary
that
provides a
deeper
understandi
ng of the
reading. The
intro ends
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Comments:
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The analysis is missing from your two paragraphs.
Rubric rating submitted on: 5/5/2016, 10:33:59 AM by bholt@ggusd.net
5

Introductory
Paragraph
3

Exceptional
introduction
for audience
and
purpose.
Includes
properly
punctuated
book title
and a
summary
that
provides a
deeper
understandi
ng of the
reading. The
intro ends
with a thesis
statement
that clearly
outlines the
analysis
plan for the
letter.

Effective
introduction
for audience
and
purpose.
Includes
properly
punctuated
book title
and a
summary
that
provides a
clear
understandi
ng of the
reading. The
intro ends
with a clear
thesis
statement..

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introduction
that includes
book title
and a
generic plot
summary.
The thesis
statement
complete
but
somewhat
vague.

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is present
but some of
the required
components
are missing
or
demonstrate
inadequate
effort or
completion.

Introduction
is lacking
many of the
requirement
s or causes
confusion
for the
reader.

Introduction
may not be
present.

Analysis
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capitalizatio
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spelling.
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Use of
relevant
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sources is
integrated
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citations
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capitalizatio
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spelling
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punctuation,
capitalizatio
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spelling.
Frequent
errors in
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and usage
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meaning.

Comments:
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sentence
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and severe,
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meaning is
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