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INTRODUCTION
1.1 Background
English at school from elementary school until senior high school and even in
university. From these facts, students are not only expected to speak English fluently
but they also have to be able to fulfill four language skills; speaking, writing, reading,
and listening. These four skills are integrated and related to each other.
Based on curriculum KTSP, all skills in teaching and learning English that are
integrated each other must be learnt and taught by both students and teacher,
including writing skill. Writing will help students mastering the other skills and of
course in mastery English completely. The students are sometimes afraid and shy to
speak what they want to say but they can tell what they think and what they want to
say into draft or writing before speaking. Thus, if students are having problem in
expressing an idea, he/she can write it down. Then, student itself or possibly the
reader will understand it. While, there are still some teachers who haven’t given their
attention on this case completely. If teacher want to help the students to be a good
writer in English, he / she must be able to teach writing effectively in the classroom.
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Teaching writing is always related to how to give feedback directly or indirectly on
Roger (2001) tells that some feedback from teacher serves unhelpful feedback
to student; they are too generalized or unclear, subjective and focused on some aspect
of performance that make the students cannot change. That is why giving feedback to
students’ writing is important skill that is seldom taught. Through feedback, we can
help students compare their own performance with the ideal and to diagnose their
But there will always be of what feedback will give the best impact of the
improvement toward the students’ writing itself not only in the short time but also in
a long time of their life. The researcher thinks indirect feedback is one of positive
support that can be given by an English teacher to their students in order to improve
students’ writing and minimize their errors. Beside that there are some reasons why
feedback can be durable, but it will keep only in mind of receiver and the feedback
can just lost in certain time. In contrast, the indirect feedback, the thought and
comment will be saved for a very long time in the memories. Indirect feedback will
The researcher did preliminary class observation to find the problem in class X1
SMA Negeri 9 Kendari. The researcher had got a fact about the performance of
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teaching writing in SMA Negeri 9 Kendari. In this school, the students had problem
in writing a text because they learnt writing without using a good approach and
treatment. They were just asked to write a composition based on the picture or topic
that had been prepared in the text book without checking their ability in mastery
aspects of writing. The students didn’t understand about certain instruction of text for
example the generic structure of the text, purposes and the language feature of the
text. The students also didn’t really know how to correct their own writing because
they had gotten the correct answer from their mistakes, but most of the corrections
only for the correction in punctuation and spelling without giving correction in
In addition, they couldn’t evaluate their own writing because they haven’t
trained to do so because the teacher hadn’t had a good approach or strategy to make
their writing better. Using teacher’s indirect feedback might be a starting point to start
the improvement for students’ ability in writing. Because the researcher thinks that
the evaluation in writing process in classroom should be started by the teacher first
before it can affect the students’ ability to evaluate their writing by themselves.
Total students in X1 are 38 students and after doing the pre-observation, the
organization and language use. The researcher assumes that the problem can be
solved by this technique and the students also can improve their writing ability
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through the teacher’s feedback before being able to correct the mistakes by
themselves.
feedback from their teacher would affect and increase their writing or not. To support
this study, the researcher observed in SMAN 9 Kendari. The reason why the
researcher wanted to do her study in this school, because it is a new school that has
just registered as a senior high school in kendari in 2003 and opened the opportunity
to do more study or research in this school. Moreover, the researcher had got some
problem related to her study in this School and wants to solve it. The researcher in
doing her action put the target on the first grade students in SMA Negeri 9 Kendari
with the purpose of students were able to write a composition better than before and
Based on the background above, the problem that came up in this study was
formulated as follow:
part of organization and language use aspect on the first grader in SMAN 9 Kendari?”
- It can add the students’ and teacher’s knowledge about how to give
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- To investigate the increasing of students’ writing trough the teacher’s indirect
feedback.
- For students: the student were hoped to be able to correct their own writing
independently.
deeply.
1.5 Assumption
writing skill.
Based on the context of the study, the hypothesis that proposed in this study
or not under teacher‘s feedback. While, the type of feedback provided was
indirect feedback that was given on students’ writing. All students’ compositions
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were assessed based on two aspect of evaluation in writing. Those were language
use and organization. The text type was descriptive text. The reason why the
researcher found that most of students had problem on those aspects of writing
and the students can improve their ability in writing if the teacher help them to
give the constructive feedback. This study focused on the students on the first
relevance to the specific site in which it occurs (Hitchcock & Hughes, 1995).
qualitative data sources. Results are shared with those directly affected, so
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- Indirect feedback is provided if the teacher indicates the location of the error
by indicating in the margins that there is an error on that line but without
them and discovering what you want to put on your reader. Writing is a
provide enough vivid detail to help the reader create a mental picture of what
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CHAPTER II
LITERATURE REVIEW
This chapter presents some actual theories as references to support this study.
essential component not only for their academic practice but also later in their
professional life. Teaching or learning how to write successfully gets even more
complicated and challenged for both language teachers and students. However, many
teachers agree that in the classroom, writing should get much attention as reading,
speaking and listening. Yet many teacher and students alike consider writing to be
most difficult subject of language skill to learn. (Senduk in hasyim, 2002: 13)
or exercises to the students. When teachers teach writing course not only teach about
how to develop ideas in writing, but also need a serious attention of how to write
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good if depends on the teachers' ability how to teach writing effectively which can
some important notes must be noticed in teaching writing and assessment. In teaching
writing, the teaching should engage students in peer /self-evaluation. When they
apply the criteria, they become better informed about the requirements of good
writing (for specific genres) and Provide students with a language for discussing their
writing. In assessing writing, teacher should respond to writing based on criteria that
have been communicated and taught to students and responses to errors. To respond
the error teacher can use a feedback that contains specific criteria for the writing task
and criteria that have been taught and communicated to the learners.
2.2 Feedback
One of the ways to make students be able to create good writing is the teacher
should provide constructive feedback to their writing. In this section, the writer wants
to explain what kind of feedback that important to students’ writing, the advantages
students’ writing performance. Ur (1996: 242) says that “in the context of teaching
general, feedback is information that is given to the learner about his or her
performance of the learning task, usually with the objective of improving their
performance”.
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In addition, Roger (2001) says “Feedback is not just about weaknesses.
emerging capabilities, and give ideas for directing further learning”. From these
definitions, it is clear that feedback is very useful in teaching and learning process,
besides students will learn how to evaluate their self (self-evaluate), it also help
students to take greater confidence of their learning and increasing the students’
performance.
in order students feel good with their writing and carry the activity through
completion (Grabe and Kaplan, 1996 : 275). So, in process writing teacher must
vital role especially in teaching process. In this case, teacher recognizes that teachers’
feedback is essential element in helping students improve, and an essential part of the
students will know the appropriate of the language feature for their composition, how
There are two kinds of teacher’s feedback; they are direct and indirect
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explicit written feedback. While, indirect feedback is when the teacher/tutor alerts
students to error using general comments, but gives students the opportunity to fix
errors themselves (Ferris, 2002 : 19). Lee (2005) defines Direct feedback is provided
when the correct form is written on student’s paper whereas indirect feedback is
provided if the teacher indicates the location of the error indirectly on the paper by
there is an error on that line but without providing the correct form.
Although there are some types of feedback, there must be the difference when
using direct or indirect feedback on students’ writing. Frodesen (2001) notes that
indirect feedback is more useful than direct feedback. Students are able to express
their ideas more clearly in writing and to get clarification on any comments that
teachers have made. Similarly, Fulgor (2006: 34) states that in indirect feedback,
students appreciated its beneficial effect on their learning and direct feedback to be
more helpful when revising syntax and vocabulary, whereas they felt that indirect
feedback was useful in encouraging them to reflect on aspects of their writing and to
develop improvements.
2003; Fratzen, 1995). The results showed that indirect feedback with student self-
editing contributes to accuracy more than direct feedback. Others have reported that
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indirect feedback may be more beneficial to students than direct feedback in editing,
because indirect feedback can guide learning and help the students solve problem by
From those statements, the researcher believes that indirect feedback will be
more increasing the students’ ability in writing and students who get indirect
feedback will be preserved in his/her brain in a long time. While, direct feedback will
be kept in their mind in a short time. If the students are only provided by direct
feedback, the student will not have opportunity to reflect and correct the errors for
themselves; they only note the note of the errors from the teacher.
To make indirect feedback is more effective, Lee (2004) state that indirect
feedback can be done by a symbol representing a specific kind of error (T=verb tense,
Sp=spelling) and to reduce student confusion, teachers can consistently use a standard
set of symbols or markings to indicate place and type of error and train the students in
should familiarize students with the system so they will not be surprised when new
Finocchiaro in hasyim (2002:23) gives the symbols or codec that can be used
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Table 1 Correction codes used to indicate error types in indirect feedback
The students cannot write alone and writing also not only a single step but a
process. To pass the process from the first draft until the final draft, they need
they need someone to check about the mistake that they made. It could be from
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teacher or peer because writing usually involves one person for another to help them
in expressing their ideas in writing form. Even though peers feedback is more
impression before they are engaged in an individual writing as practice. Here, teacher
can be as describer when he/she gives feedback. But before that, teacher should be a
The patterns of feedback and responses given by the writing teacher depend
very much on the teacher’s conception of the composing process and his/her
understanding of learner’s errors. Teachers may, on the one hand, present themselves
as helpful facilitators offering support and guidance; on the other hand, they may act
and feedback given by the teacher should not be confined to the last stage of the
writing process. The marking of products should always open more opportunities in
which students can redraft their work. By depriving them of their opportunity for
redrafting and reassessing, the students cannot have the chance of correcting the
In addition, students are able to express their ideas more clearly in writing and
to get clarification on any comments indirectly that teachers have made to their
writing.
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2.4 The Assessment Technique of Students’ Writing
In assessing the students’ writing Quality, Jacob (1981: 60) suggests five
word/idiom choice, and usage, word form mastery, and appropriate register.
Language use (grammar) in writing activity, the students will create the sentences
based on their ideas and the words in the sentences must be arranged grammatically
which deals with tenses and agreement. (Mc. Crimmon ,1984:596). The last is
Period {.}, Question mark {?}, Exclamation mark {!}, Comma {,}, semi colon {;},
Apostrophe {‘}).
Gardner and Johnson (1997) describe the stages of the writing process:
move back and forth between the stages of the process, both consciously and
unconsciously. Young writers, however, benefit from the structure and security of
following the writing process in their writing”. Additionally, as Campbell points out,
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"there is no single writing process" (1998: 10), there are three basic stages writers go
Besides, three basic stages in writing also delivered by Ron White (1987:325)
states that the stages of writing process consists of planning, drafting, and revising.
planning is any orderly procedure used to bring about a desire result. In this stage, the
author/writer just builds basic of a topic that should depends on the writer/author’s
piece of writing. In here, the writer can explore and improve his/her idea. This stage
series of strategies designed to re-examine and re-evaluate the choices that have
created a piece of writing. The revising always comes up after giving feedback to the
about how you want to improve your writing, looking at your writing from a different
point of view, and picking places where your writing could be clearer, more
Appelebe in Mappe (2000) states more complete stages, that “there are
different views on the stages that the writers go through in producing a piece of
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writing, but a typically through model identifies four stages: pre-writing, drafting,
1 Pre-writing
before they write their sentences in the first draft. A typical pre-writing activity in the
process approach would be for learners to brainstorm on the topic being provided. By
this way, students would get motivation to write because they feel that they have
2 Drafting
In this stage, students would select among ideas during pre-writing and
topic. The content might be written without considering the grammatical aspect first.
3 Revising
In this stage, the students review a draft to check content and organization based
on the feedback from him or herself and teacher or peers. Biaael in Mappe (2000)
emphasizes that revision is a process in which writers not only polish their style, but
also develop their ideas. In this stage, the teacher help the students through the
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revision to shape and reshape the text into final form, and it’s focused more on
4 Editing
This is where the role of teacher in giving indirect feedback will be applied. In
this stage, the students check their final text for some mistakes they have made based
on the feedback given, such as spelling, punctuation, grammar, and all presentation.
Shih in Mappe (2000) classifies three stages of editing for grammar: editing at
Editing at discourse level is meant the writer needs to make changes in one
sentence, such as making the subject plural instead of singular. Editing at sentence
level is to find out the errors in sentences, such as: phrase, clause and sentence
pattern. Editing at word level, editing morphological errors require checking to see
that affixes and grammatical function words, such as: auxiliary verb, articles and
preposition correct. The writer needs to focus his/her special attention on the ends of
words in order to catch the missing of an incorrect ending: s/es, d/ed, ing as well an
There are some approaches in writing; one of them is genre based approach.
The use of genre approach in solving the problem in students’ writing, particularly in
(1992:17) a genre is kind of text types that have structured in different way and
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characterized by own language feature. Genre based approach can be said to make the
text structurally and characterized which consists of purpose, generic structure, and
language feature.
According to Martin in Grabe and Kaplan (1996), the factual writing consists
of six types, they are; recount, procedure, description, report, explanation, and
exposition. However in this study, the text will be focused on the descriptive text.
provide enough vivid detail to help the reader create a mental picture of what is being
written about. Descriptive text can be divided from its purpose, generic structure and
and also to help a writer develop an aspect of their work, for example to create a
particular mood, atmosphere or describe a place so that the reader can create vivid
pictures of characters, places, objects etc (Martin in Grabe and Kaplan, 1996).
in parts, qualities, or/and characteristics. They may choose vivid, fresh language, they
may use examples, they might take something ordinary and by comparing it with
something extraordinary, make it interesting, or they may use their senses. (Medina ,
2003 : 152).
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The language uses of this text should rely on precisely chosen vocabulary
with carefully chosen adjectives and adverbs, It is focused and concentrated only on
the aspects that add something to the main purpose of the description. Sensory
description - what is heard, seen, smelt, felt, tasted. Precise use of adjectives, similes,
experience that "puts the reader there" focuses on key details, powerful verbs and
precise nouns, Using attributive and identifying process, Using adjective and
classifiers in nominal group, and Using simple present tense (Medina ,2003 : 152).
Some studies have been done to investigate the use of feedback on students’
writing in teaching and learning process. Hasyim (2002), Paryatun (1997), Dewi
Santi (2007) had conducted their studies in Haluoleo University, to investigate the
effect of teacher’s feedback on students’ writing. Sri Luciani (2002) did her study in
junior high school. Although she investigated the effect of teacher feedback only
asked the students to write about a given topic, and then asked one to ten students to
write their essay on the whiteboard, after that, the lecturer correcting students’ essay,
and then, the lecturer asked the students to rewrite their essay and finally collected
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the students’ essay. The result showed that before lecturer gave the correction the
total score was 48,22 and after lecturer gave the correction, the total score was 77,36.
direct or indirect correction does not improve students’ writing significantly. The
writer exposed direct correction technique in her experimental class and exposed
indirect correction in the control class. However, the writer did not also explain
clearly why there was no significant different between direct and indirect correction
and found that teacher’s feedback was effective. Moreover, Dewi Santi exposed
teacher’s feedback under correction and assessment (comment and grade), also
suggestion and praise. He focused giving feedback on students’ writing that would be
language use, and mechanics (Jacobs, 1981). In the end the result showed an
improvement of students’ writing. That was on pretest 74,2 and in post test was
78,15.
learners with regards to what strategy to use in responding to students’ writing in the
English Preparatory Program compared two groups: one with direct feedback and the
other with indirect feedback using correction codes. It was found that the group
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which received indirect coded error feedback had more accuracy than direct feedback
in writing.
Those results of previous studies indicate that feedback both directly and
another research proves that indirect feedback is better than direct feedback. Hence,
the present study will conduct the study that is different with previous studies by
using indirect feedback. In this case, the writer not only wants to prove that the
students writing performance will be better than direct feedback but also indirect
Further, this study serves a different design from previous study because those
between direct and indirect feedback. While this study only uses indirect feedback
that is used to solve the problem in two aspects of writing, those are organization and
language use.
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CHAPTER III
This chapter explained the methodology of the research that was conducted.
The procedure of the research in this study consisted of design of the study, setting of
the study, subject of the study, factors that were observed, instrument of the study,
The design of this study was classroom action research because the teacher is
research aims to follow the process of the improving students ability and is conducted
by the teacher itself by reflecting his /her work and trying to improve his/her way in
teaching writing especially to give indirect feedback. Therefore, both teacher and
reflection (Kemmis and Mc Taggart in Stringer, 1999: 18). The model that is
proposed for teacher in doing action research follows the cyclical structure outlined
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The four “moments” of action research defined by Kemmis and McTaggart
This stage involves the teacher and the researcher prepared the lesson scenario for the
action, the teacher and the researcher prepared the technique will be applied in
solving the problem they face, preparing the teaching material, prepare the instrument
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that will be used to collect data. Planning is the activity of preparing the problem
solving to be used in reflecting the problem that is gotten before action. In relation
with the problem that students have, the teacher and researcher have preparation as
follows:
good order. Related to the generic structure of description, teacher must teach the
organization, teacher prepared a model of text, in which the text was formed into
Teacher would teach the student based on the lesson plan as a guide of teaching
that has been made by the researcher cooperates with the English teacher. The
text. To make students understand easily about the use of language feature itself,
teacher prepares the model of text, in which the language feature will be shown in
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4. To make the process of teaching and learning would run effectively, the
teacher made the plans in lesson plan. Concerning to the limited time in each
meeting, the teaching and learning process are divided into two meetings. Lesson
plan is prepared in appendix 1. The teacher also gave some copies of material to
the students including the codes used to evaluate their writing and prepared the
observation sheet (appendix 7) and field note (appendix 10) to do the observation
In this stage, the teacher and the researcher would do the planning that had been
arranged. The teacher taught based on the lesson plan that have been made in
planning stage. The teaching and learning process was begun by preparation. In
this step, students would be asked to deliver their knowledge about descriptive
text and what they have written before. The teacher would start the action by
giving the students model text and asked the students to compare the text with
their first composition. Then teacher asked the students to identify the model text
and learn it. The model text is prepared in appendix 4. After that, the teacher
would ask the students to discuss about the organization and language use both in
the text model and their writing. In discussing about organization and language
use in descriptive writing, the students responded and gave their understanding
about the discussion. After that, the teacher will explain more what should be
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The teacher would explain that a well-focused subject can be ordinary or
emphasizing what makes it interesting or new and unusual, asked them to pick
something specific, an event, a person, or an animal and ask them to give the
detail description. When the students want to create a clear pattern of organization
the introduction should work from general to specific, ending in a thesis sentence,
have several paragraphs that develop and describe the topic, and the conclusion
The teacher would notice the students that they can use their senses to
describe the scene. All of the senses can be used in a descriptive text. For
example touch, smell, hearing, taste, and vision, although the students may just
teacher would conduct the joins construction section. In which teacher and
students cooperate to make a draft. The teacher would prepare some topic option
that can be chosen by student to make their writing, for example, describe a thing,
animal, or the most important person in their life etc. the role of teacher here as a
guide, observer and counselor during the process. If a student has questions, the
teacher will write the question on whiteboard in order to other students can learn
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c. Observing the effect of the implementation relies on collecting data.
the strategies and the way of teacher in solving the problem and students’ work.
Observation would be done during the teaching and learning process was
decision-making. The researcher and the teacher work together to find out the
mistake or obstacle they have during the action is conducted. In here, they decide
what ways will be applied in the next cycle as the problem solving in the previous
cycle and arrange the second lesson plan. In reflection, also the teacher and the
researcher analyzed the data that have been taken during the action.
In this study, before the action was conducted, first the researcher did
and giving test to the students to know their writing performance. After the
actions were conducted, the researcher then did the test again. It was aimed to
the action.
This study was conducted in SMU Negeri 9 Kendari. This school had
registered in 2003. The study was conducted in the first grade students. The first
grade students of SMU Negeri 9 Kendari who enrolled in academic year 2007/2008
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are 226 students, consisting of five parallel classes; they were class X1, X2, X3, X4,
X5, X6. From these six classes, the teacher only took one class purposively which the
problem found. More clearly about the classes can be seen in table 2 below:
No Class Sum
1 X1 38
2 X2 40
3 X3 38
4 X4 36
5 X5 38
6 X6 36
Total 226
The researcher took the subject by using purposive sampling, because the
researcher took the subject based on the problem found before conducting the action.
The researcher found the problem in the first grader at X1, which consisted of 38
students. To find the subject that was observed, the researcher took the students’
composition, which told the description about the most important person in their life
After doing the pre-observation before the study was conducted, the
researcher had gotten about 30 students who had problem in writing a related text.
The researcher found that most of the students had problem in organization area and
language use. To make it easier to be controlled and see the writing improvement in
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part of organization and language use, the researcher only focused on 10 students
The instruments that the researcher used in this study were as follows:
1. Students’ writing
2. Field note, which was aimed to note the supporter data that related to the
object in this study. This note also was used to record the teaching learning
researcher and teacher saw and took a note about students’ progress in the
classroom
researcher observed the teacher’ strategies in solve problems during the action
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to help presentation of the data and taking conclusion. (See observation sheet
in appendix 7).
The data of this study was qualitative and quantitative data. The qualitative data
is the description of the process during the action, students’ writing and teacher
feedback itself and the strategies of teacher to solve the problem. While, the
quantitative data is the result of students’ achievement before and after the action is
applied.
a. Observation.
applied.
b. Students’ writing; the teacher evaluated the students writing from the first
1. Teacher explained about the descriptive text in general and explains the
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2. Students draft and ‘monitor’ their texts
4. Teacher responded to the first draft by giving feedback of all aspects but more
concentrate on the body of text in area of language use and organization and
5. Students responded to codec given and comment, then rewrite their drafts
9. The teacher again noted down on the first draft any further explanations that
were necessary.
10. Teacher responded to the second draft checking whether the student is able to
11. After the teacher gave feedback to students’ 2nd draft, the students rewrote
12. The teacher provided grade and praise to students’ final draft.
In evaluating the students’ writing the researcher used the ESL composition
consist of four component bur the researcher only focused on two component of
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writing, they are language use and organization. Here are the criteria of ESL
composition:
Writing
20-18 Excellent to very good; fluent expression, ideas clearly
sequencing cohesive
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construction, frequent errors of negation, agreement,
confused or obscured
enough to evaluate
There were two independent raters in assessing students’ writing. The first rater
was the researcher herself and the second rater is an English teacher of SMU Negeri 9
Kendari. The researcher chose the English teacher of the first grader students because
she taught writing subject in the fist grade. For that reason, she is qualified for
The students’ writings were taken randomly. The two raters, the English
teacher and the researcher rated student’s writing independently and record each
other and calculated the inter rater agreement is calculated. During the assessment
session, the names of students are covered by piece of paper to avoid the scoring
animus.
level of quality.
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2. The score of composition in inter-rater training was calculated in
3. The score scale description was discussed again after the scoring
session has begun to make sure that the raters are not deviating from
scoring guides.
Then to measure the applying inter-rater, whether both raters have significant
correlation or not, the researcher applies the product moment formula, as follow:
{ N ∑ xy − ( ∑ x )( ∑ y ) }
rxy =
{ N ∑ x 2 − ( ∑ x ) 2 }{ N ∑ y 2 − ( ∑ y ) 2}
Where:
N = number of subjects
The result of inter-rater agreement is 0,947, it showed that there was high correlation
The data analysis of this study is qualitative where the data is presented in words.
Those data are analyzed after the observation is conducted. In analyzing data, the
researcher uses three steps; reduction, the presentation, and taking conclusion.
1. Reduction.
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In this step, the researcher selected the data in which the data was
In this step, the researcher described all the data that have been found
into words.
3. Taking conclusion.
After describing the data, the researcher took conclusion about the
The students as the target of this study are expected to achieve score 14 upper
(good) for organization and 18 upper (good) for language use by using ESL
students were able to write a good composition relating to the organization and
language use in their descriptive text under teacher’s indirect feedback on their
writing text by achieving marking scheme (good) in ESL composition (see table 3,
pg. 32-33).
CHAPTER IV
This chapter presents the finding and discussion of the findings. The findings
consist of the description of students writing problem that was got from pre-
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observation, activities of the first cycle until the second cycle which each of them
includes the discussion of result of this study and the supported theories.
Based on the observation of the result of students’ composition before conducting the
action, it found that there were several problems related to the organization and
seen on one of student’s composition in appendix 13. This composition was taken
from one of their writing assignment in English text book. A student composition was
entitled “My TV”. In this student’s composition, we can see that the student didn’t
know about how to organize descriptive text with a good organization. The student
without giving some description about what this student’s TV looks like, the special
item in this student’s TV, or other detail things about this student’s TV. This student
just shared about TV in General. A part from this student’s lack to understand how to
write a descriptive text, it also can be found that actually based on the topic given, the
students couldn’t develop his words, sentences and ideas to write as much as possible
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about the topic. In the end of the composition, he/she didn’t give conclusion/
organize the text based on its generic structure in order to produce a text in good
Beside organization, this student also had problem of using Language use to
produce good text. The component of language use, in which consists of Agreement,
were many unstructured sentences from beginning until the end of the composition.
For example, it was written for example, “television in very too big”, “the television
is information with very you know by many peoples”, “much different distinction
This student was not the only one who made mistakes. Most students made
the same mistake or even worse. This result indicated that students did mistake in part
of language use and organization. Mostly, in language use area, students made
mistakes in part of, agreement, tense, word order, pronoun, and article. In
organization, the students didn’t know about good order in organizing a text,
Responding to those problems, the researcher and the teacher planned to apply
teacher’s indirect feedback in their writings. This method was used to solve two basic
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problem of writing. In applying this method, teacher used one of a text which was
descriptive text, and students were hoped to be able to produce the text based on the
In relation with those problems, the researcher and the English teacher discussed
A. Planning
1. The researcher and the teacher planned to teach how to organize their writing
in a good order related to the generic structure of descriptive text. The teacher
(Appendix 1).
text in which the text was formed into orientation, and then followed by description
teach the students based on the lesson plan as a guide of teaching that had been made
by researcher cooperate with the English teacher. The lesson plan can be seen in
appendix 2.
2. The teacher planned to teach students the language feature of descriptive text.
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the model of text, in which the language feature was shown in underlined
3. To make the process of teaching and learning run effectively, the teacher
made those plans in lesson plan. The lesson plan was made in form of genre
teaching learning process were divided into three meetings. The 1st meeting
generic structure and the use of language feature in descriptive text and also
they started to write their first draft. Then in the 2 nd meeting, they would get
the feedback from the first draft and revise it in this meeting. The teaching
better than before and also to see their improvement under teacher indirect
feedback
4. The researcher prepared the observation sheet and field note to observe the
process of teaching and learning activity. In doing the observation and taking
note during the action the researcher cooperated with the English teacher. The
observation sheet can be seen in appendix 7 and field note can be seen in
appendix 10.
B. Action
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Action is kind of activity that was done by applying the planning that had been
arranged before. The teaching learning process was done based on the lesson plan
The actions of fist cycle consisted of two meetings. The first meeting was the
activity where the teacher shared and taught the student about the purpose, generic
structure and language feature of descriptive text. In explaining and teaching writing,
the teacher used genre approach which consists of preparation, modeling, and joint
construction, beside that the teacher also discussed about the feedback, the codec
errors/ the symbols that the teacher were going to use in their writing then asked the
The second meeting, the teaching and learning process focused on students’
1st draft, discussed it and found what the problem on their writing and wrote the
revision of the 1st draft after the teacher gave indirect feedback on their writing. The
students already got the result and indirect feedback from the teacher. Then the
students created 2nd draft as revision of 1st draft and they made their writing based on
the pattern of descriptive text that had been taught by the teacher in the first meeting.
For more clear about the meetings the researcher explained more detail, as follow:
1. 1st meeting
The first meeting was held on Saturday, august 23rd 2008 at 07.30–10.20 am.
The teacher started the learning process by giving students copies of model
text and asked students to compare with their composition on 1st draft. Then the
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teacher instructed students to learn the model of text. After that, teacher asked
students to discuss about the generic structure and language feature of the model text.
In discussing about introduction, the teacher asked the students opinion about
delivering what they read in the text. They mentioned that the generic structure which
Then, teacher asked them to pick something specific, as person, an animal, or a thing.
After that, the teacher asked them to give the description orally. In this process,
students pick one of their friends in that class, namely Syakir. Here, they gave
description about Syakir, they said “Syakir is my classmate”, “Syakir is age 15 years
old”, “Syakir is handsome boy and tall”. Another student said “Syakir cleaver, he
The teacher continued the explanation about the organization. The teacher
told them, when they wanted to create a clear pattern of descriptive text, the
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thesis sentences. It had several paragraphs that was developed and described the topic
and then in conclusion, it should restate the thesis. The teacher also noticed them that
they could use their sense to describe the subject. All of the senses could be used in a
descriptive text; touch, smell, hearing, taste, and vision, although the student just
After discussing about the characteristic of descriptive text, the teacher then
teacher asked some students to identify and show what tense that the text model used,
for example the teacher said “can you tell me what tense does the text use?” some
students responded by saying “simple continuous tense”, “passive voice present” and
other students said “simple present tense”. After that, teacher clarified the wrong
answer by showing the sentences were taken from text and teacher herself. Teacher
said “if you want to describe about something or the person activity or condition in
the present, you have to use simple present tense and the characteristic were Do,
Does, V1, Vs/Es, ToBe”. The teacher also gave some related example (he eats
banana every day, I go to the market every Sunday, he goes shopping twice a week)
The teacher then asked the student to recall the sentences they had made about
their friend “Syakir”. Sometimes students made mistake to make sentence but the
teacher asked students correct it by themselves, for example, the teacher wrote in the
whiteboard “he always get good….” The students then corrected the sentence “he
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always gets…..” and told them when they want to make simple present sentence, they
had to notice with subject pronoun and verb, in which the verb should in form
V+s/es, if the subjects were He, She, and It. Then another sentence was made “,
“Syakir is age 15 years old” and corrected by the teacherby explaining when they
wanted to say/write somebody’s age, they just need to write “Syakir is 15 years old”
because years old representative of age itself. After explaining the tense pattern to
them, the teacher asked the students to find out the simple present sentences in the
model text. The students gave response by showing the sentences “Borobudur is
world”, etc.
The teacher then gave students another text. The text was an example of
indirect feedback they would receive and be completed with the symbols of codec
errors. For example for language use consisted of SP (spelling), S/VA (subject/verb
agreement), VT (verb tense), WC (word choice), and GR (sentence structure) and for
organization the teacher underlined, put an arrow and gave notes/comments about the
text and also gave them the model text, teacher conducted join construction. In this
session, both teacher and students cooperated to make a draft. The teacher suggested
describing about “Syakir”, their friend once again. Here the teacher wrote all the
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After joint construction, the teacher asked the students to compose a draft
independently. The teacher asked the students to search the topic to be written as their
first draft. Some topics were prepared by the teacher, such as “my favorite thing”,
“the most important person in my life”, and “my favorite place”. Most students chose
topic “the most important person in my life”. Then teacher explained that they could
write about one of their family members, a best friend, a girl friend or a boyfriend.
The teacher then asked the students to write a composition consists of 3 or more
The implementation in this session was running well because students were
given opportunity to deliver their idea and to ask some question about the material.
Even though there were some students who didn’t pay attention to the teacher’s
explanation, overall the process teaching and learning was running well. 10 minutes
left before the teacher ended the class, the teacher asked the students to submit their
draft. She told them that in the next meeting, they would receive their draft and look
2. 2nd meeting
The second meeting was held on Tuesday, August 26th 2008 at 07.15 – 09.15 am. The
teacher started the class by greeting the students and checked the attendance list for
about 5 minutes. In this meeting, the teacher distributed their 1st draft.
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Before starting the main activity, the teacher did brainstorm about the
previous material and asked their difficulties in composing a draft. Most students
reported what problem they had in composing a text. They said they still had
activity ran for about 30 minutes. After that, the teacher started the main activity.
During the process, sometimes students walked around the class to find a
dictionary to their friends or came close to the teacher and researcher to ask some
words in English. Some students also discussed about the topic chosen with their
partner. In here, while the researcher was taking note and observing the class activity,
teacher monitored students activity and help them when the students got difficulties.
This process of writing was run for about 70 minutes. The last 10 minutes teacher
collected the students’ compositions and informed that they could take the result in
C. Observation
researcher kept writing notes to see the process of technique application. Starting
from beginning until the end of the lesson, the teacher and the researcher used
observation sheet that had been prepared before. The observation sheet can be seen in
appendix 7. The teacher and the researcher not only used observation sheet, but also
used field note. The field note can be seen in appendix 10.
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During class activity, the researcher had several points about both teacher and
students’ activities while observing the class. Here are some teacher activities in
classroom during the 1st meeting and 2nd meeting were underway:
1. At the beginning of the lesson, teacher explained the material to the student, in
case of descriptive text. So, they got some general illustration about the
descriptive text.
2. Teacher told the student that every finishing their writing/draft, the teacher
3. Teacher explained the general and language feature of the descriptive text.
4. The teacher then explained kind of feedback would be used. In here, the teacher
explained what indirect feedback is, the function of indirect feedback , and how
5. The teacher explained about each symbols were used in part of language use
and told them in part organization the teacher would comment the introduction,
description and conclusion. So the students could correct their writing and add
their knowledge.
6. The teacher and the researcher took note about students’ questions, their
7. After explanation of the material to the students, the teacher asked them to write
their 1st draft about the topic they had chosen before, that was “the most
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8. In the second meeting, the teacher distributed the students’ 1st draft and the
drafts were already checked and given indirect feedback by the teacher.
9. Teacher asked them to write a composition that would be their second draft
10. The teacher monitored the process during students composing their draft and the
teacher sometimes helped them when they had problem with the vocabularies or
words in English.
11. The teacher informed to the students that they would receive the result in the
next meeting.
2. The students concentrated to the teacher’s explanation about the material and
asked about how the teacher gave indirect feedback to their draft.
4. Students mentioned what things could be put in generic structure and language
5. Some students were shy to deliver or express their idea especially in using
English words. To overcome this problem, the teacher asked them to deliver in
Indonesia
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6. The students took notes about the important points from the teacher’s
explanation, especially about how teacher gave indirect feedback and symbol in
7. In the second meeting, the students took their first draft and saw the indirect
8. The students wrote the composition based on teacher instruction and revised
9. The students paid attention to their writing and asked some question about the
feedback. For example, what ‘s the meaning of SP, VT and arrow sign, circle,
etc. even the teacher already explained and gave them some copies of feedback
10. During the process of writing students often asked the teacher and their friend
Based on the activities, observation, and the students’ 1st and 2nd draft result in
the first cycle, the researcher found there were several problems on the students’
vocabularies, organization and language use, and the way teacher gave the feedback
to the students’ composition. So, the researcher and the teacher planned the second
D. Reflection
Based on observation that had been done in the first cycle, the first meeting didn’t get
any difficulties to transfer the material and students also often asked about some
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question such as what the descriptive text is, how they can start to write and what for
The problem appeared when the teacher asked them to write their 1st draft in the
this time, they had to write a descriptive text about the most important person in their
life. During the process, the students got difficulties to express their ideas into
writing. They still hadn’t understand yet about descriptive text even the teacher had
14, draft 1. In the first draft, students didn’t make a good improvement because they
still lack in part organization and language use. When teacher checked their work
before giving indirect feedback on their 1st draft, the fact that they confused how to
move from the first paragraph to the next paragraph and also how to differentiate the
this student composed unorganized composition and poor language use. Actually the
student already had good content but the student got problem how to organize and
develop the idea in the composition. Here is an untitled composition (appendix 14,
draft 1):
SP
“hai my name is Adnin Aderiska And uSP can call me Adnin. I live in
Haeba Street Pengadilan tinggi agama No.1(PUNC.) I have one sister. She is
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WC VT
college in universitas Hasanuddin Makassar my sister old 20 years old I
class.(PUNC) because they want to real friendship(unclear meaning) to me and nice wit
SP
all. Every in class we play and study together GR”
Some mistakes had been made in language use aspect and organization. In language
use, the mistakes were underlined. It can be seen that the student did many mistakes
from beginning until the end of sentences. For the organization aspect, this student
didn’t write the composition based on the generic structure of descriptive text. Those
student hadn’t made a good improvement that is related to the generic structure
the idea, the student was still lack of vocabulary and the student didn’t put the title of
composition. Moreover, the sentences were still choppy even the reader might be able
to understand it. In language use, it can be seen that some mistakes were occurred in
PUNC/punctuation (period, comma), and VT/ verb tense (my sister old 20 years old,
my class in X1).
Another students sample was taken in the same problem. In here the student
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I have brother.(PUNC) But one that I’m very(NN)like. He have name is
He live(S/VA) in jl. Ir. Soekarno number 42T. he is the most important person in
family now.
NP
He have(S/VA) one boy. He very(WO) like(S/VA) to play by her boy. Bedidest(SP) its(WC)
he also like(S/VA) sports. Sports that he likes is badminton, football and table
always(NN) teach(S/V)A me about lessons, that I don’t know. So(PUNC) he don’t(S/VA) like
This composition is different from above sample. This student wrote two
paragraphs that talked about “Brother”. From the title, it can be seen that the student
had a good idea to write. This student wrote some ideas about “brother” that
obviously, it was still general and needed to be improved. Even the ideas were
choppy in the first draft but in the next draft, this student was able to make an average
composition, it can be seen in underlined word. Mostly, the mistakes are about the
subject and verb agreement (S/VA), punctuation (PUNC), word choice (WC), word
order (WO), Spelling (SP), not necessary word (NN). (Appendix 15, draft 1).
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The second meeting activity focused on students’ composition, those are
distributing students’ 1st draft, discussing about the problem on their writing and
revising it based on the feedback given. Some problems appeared during the process
of writing 2nd draft as a revision of 1st draft. They often asked about the English of
some words or what vocabulary that they can use in a sentence and many other
problems found when the process was over. An example of students’ writing can be
seen as follow:
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The sample writing above showed that some mistakes were still occurred,
mostly the mistakes were in language use aspect, while in organization aspect, this
composition is better than in the first draft. To compare the first draft and the second
From the result, in the first draft the students who achieved the target Average
to Very Good only 6 students for organization and 5 students for language use. The
2nd draft it increased but it was still far from the target want to be achieved.
Based on the overall process in cycle I, The researcher found that some
problems appeared during the process of writing from 1 st and 2nd meeting in the first
cycle. First, the problem came from their vocabulary problem. During the process of
writing, the students often asked about some words in English or what vocabulary
they can use in their sentences. For example, the question “mam, what english for
“ibuku baik sekali”?.” Another question is “what good language for “ teman kelas”,
friend class atau friend?”, etc. In here the students get difficulties because they didn’t
bring dictionary. That’s why during the process, students always walked around the
class to borrow the dictionary or asked the teacher and researcher to help them with
it.
The role of teacher in here was clearly seen that the teacher at that time helped
the students who got problem in their vocabulary and informed to them to bring
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Even there were some problems, based on the result of 2nd draft the students
also made an improvement after the second meeting was conducted. The students
showed an improvement in part of language use but only few students who achieved
the target. The students were able to produce composition based on generic structure
of descriptive text. This problem was influenced by the way teacher in giving
feedback to them. They didn’t understand because the teacher wrote the feedback in
unorganized style.
Too many mistakes made them difficult to see the feedback within their
sentences and sometimes didn’t know if there was feedback on theirs. Another
problem was also shared by students about the teacher’s comments. The teacher
wrote the comments in English, so the students sometimes had difficulties to translate
it into Indonesia.
Beside about students’ problem in their composition, there were also several
problems that affected the teaching and learning process, for example less of
attention, less motivation to write, stuck with the ideas and sentences going to be
developed, etc. In solving the problem, the next cycle will be conducted to solve
those problems.
A. Planning
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The result in the reflection of previous cycle showed several problems. Dealing with
those problems, the researcher and the teacher did preparation as follows:
1. The students’ score on organization and language use aspect were far from the
target and it caused by less of attention and motivation. Less of attention may
also be the important factor why the first cycle still got problems. Some
students did other activities, such as chatting with friend, drawing, etc. the
teacher and the researcher planned to solve those problems by controlling the
class more than before, giving warning to the students, and sit or stood around
2. Teacher and the researcher planned to give more explanation about the use of
language feature. Based on the problem they had on the second draft, the
problem in using language feature was about Verb1, Verb + S/ES, subject and
object pronoun, possessive adjective and noun, article (a, an, and the),
preposition, etc.
problems of the students were they composed better organization order but
still poor language use. Besides, the way applying feedback made students
confused because teacher wrote the feedback in unclear way and messy. So
the teacher and the researcher planned a new strategy in giving feedback by
using feedback sheet model (see appendix 12). This model was used when the
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4. Teacher and researcher planned to prepare model text to be analyzed together
5. The first meeting in this cycle would be used to focus their attention on
teacher explanation about language use. While in the second cycle, they
6. To make the teaching and learning process would run effectively and
efficiency, the teacher and the researcher prepared the lesson plan. The lesson
7. Teacher and the researcher prepared observation sheet and field note to
observe the process and the condition of teaching and learning activity.
B. Action
In this cycle there were two meetings (3rd meeting and 4th meeting). The teacher and
the researcher did this cycle because the first cycle couldn’t solve the problem, so this
cycle was hoped can solve the problem they got from the first cycle from 1st meeting
– 2nd meeting. The material was still about descriptive text with the students’
compositions but this cycle more focused on their comprehension of language use,
because the first cycle had already solved the problem in area organization.
In the third meeting, the teaching learning process focused on language use of
descriptive text, students’ mistakes in the second draft and then to check their writing,
teacher applied new strategy in giving feedback. The forth meeting was an activity to
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find out whether there was improvement after applying the new strategy of written
feedback to their 2nd draft or not. In the forth meeting, the students composed the 3rd
draft based on the correction given on their 2nd draft and see their improvement.
For more clear about the meetings the researcher explained more detail, as follow:
a. 3rd meeting
The third meeting was held on Tuesday, September 2nd 2008 at 07.15 – 09.15. The
class begun with usual activity such as greeted students and checked the attendance
list for about 5 minutes. After that, teacher started the material. The teacher focused
this meeting to explain about their problems until the students comprehend and be
independence in writing. The teacher informed the students she would distribute their
writing for a while to see their improvement and the student had to collect them back
The teacher informed to the students that she had checked their composition and
already written the feedback with new strategy by using feedback sheet on their
compositions, so the students didn’t confused with the feedback given. For
organization, the teacher still used comment, underline the sentence /paragraphs but it
was little bit different, because the teacher used both Indonesian and English for the
comment they might not understand. The teacher also let the students to ask about the
The teacher explained by focusing on most mistakes that student had. For
example grammar, punctuation, proper words, word order, etc. The teacher took one
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example of student’s composition. After that teacher presented one of student
composition in whiteboard and asked the students to find the mistakes. To get
students’ attention on the text, the teacher prepared the copies of the text. Some
students responded the teacher command by mentioning the mistakes. Those mistakes
were about the using of Verb I, Ves/s, To Be, Pronoun, and articles (a, an, and the),
etc, punctuation.
The teacher asked the students to remember what they had written as 2nd draft
and also let them to ask some questions about language use. During this process, the
students looked so enthusiast to ask questions to the teacher. It really helped because
they teacher didn’t have to spend her power to explain all about language use itself.
“mam……, when we bisa gunakan V+ S/es”, “kalau kita mau pake she berarti we
must use is, kan mam?”, or “apa bedanya he-him, she-her,they-their,we-our….”, etc.
While the students were asking some questions, the teacher didn’t forget to
write the point of their questions on whiteboard, in order the other students could
remember by taking note. The teacher then explained the question one by one to the
students. In here the teacher always repeated what she had explained in the first
meeting. She also asked the students to pay attention to her explanation and keep
The student most asked about the changes of verbs for “he, she, it, I, You, We,
and they”. The teacher explained that when the students wanted to use subjects “he,
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she, it” they must change the verb by adding S/ES, for example “he manages the
housework everyday”. Whereas, the students must use V1 without adding by S/ES
when use the subject; I, you, we, they, for example “they manage the housework
together everyday.” The students also asked when they can use S/ES.
To train the students, the teacher asked them to give and write some sentences
on their textbook. Beside about the change of the verb, the students also asked about
word order when they wanted to combine a noun with an adjective. The teacher then
explained that they had to put adjective before noun, for example black (adjective)
beautiful girl or beautiful woman. The teacher always reminded them about
agreement between subject and verb, the order of noun and adjective, the use of sense
(hear, taste, see, touch, etc) when they wanted to describe someone. The teacher
didn’t forget to encourage them in the end of meeting to write a better composition
and always consulted their problem to the teacher. The students gave very good
This activity was done for about 70 minutes. Before ending the meeting, the
teacher informed the students that they would revise their 2nd drafts and applied what
b. 4th meeting
The 4th meeting was done on Tuesday, September 9th 2008 at 08.15 - 10.15 a.m.
The teacher started the lesson by distributing their 2nd draft. The teacher re-informed
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to the students about the students’ lack in their composition in this case the students
had problem in using language feature. The teacher motivated the students again as
she did in the previous meetings because it would help the students to do better.
The teacher was helped by the researcher to distribute the result of their draft.
In their writing, they received not only their drafts but also their feedback sheets.
Then, the teacher gave 10 minutes for students to see the feedback sheets and the
Based on the problem on their first and second drafts, it can be seen that they
still had problem in part of language use. So in this meeting the teacher explained
more about language use. In the class, the teacher didn’t teach the students by using
hand out anymore, but she used students’ error in the second draft (see appendix 15)
After distributing all the composition, the teacher reminded again to look at
their mistakes. Here, the teacher explained the language feature mostly by using
students’ mistakes they always made. This was one of her strategy to make students
learned about their mistakes and didn’t repeat that again. Having discussed about
some mistakes in the composition, the teacher then asked the students to rewrite their
composition based on the feedback given. The students who always walked around
the class were less than in the previous meeting because the teacher reminded them to
bring a dictionary as one of regulation to get in the class and the English score.
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During the process of independent construction, the class activity was better
than before. The teacher strategy to stand around noisy area was successful and the
students also quieter than before, but the discussion between partners were still done
by them. While, the teacher was monitoring and helping students with the process,
Then, the teacher asked students to correct and rewrite their composition
based on the feedback sheet given. During the process of writing, the teacher always
reminded them about general structure and also language feature of descriptive text.
In this activity, the teacher didn’t work alone she was helped by the researcher to
control the class. The last 10 minutes, the students finished their draft and then
C. Observation
While doing the implementation in the second cycle, in second cycle, researcher
1. At the beginning, the teacher started class activities by asking about the
previous material and what the students got from the material before.
2. The teacher informed to the students about the students’ lack in their
3. When the teacher distributed students’ 2nd draft, she also gave the feedback
sheet to the students and asks the students to put attention on their mistakes that
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4. The teacher permitted the students to ask some question about their composition
5. Both teacher and researcher kept focusing to see the students’ progress in
writing.
researcher found that when students were writing, they had problem how to decide
the proper word to use in sentence, for example they asked wash the dishes not wash
the plate, do the laundry not wash the clothes. The role of the teacher was really
important in here where she can help students by explaining every misunderstanding
word.
D. Reflection
In this cycle, there was actually no significant problem found since the solution from
the teacher and researcher was successfully useful to students. The problems
generally treated well since the solutions from teacher and researcher were
Based on observation in the second cycle, the result of 3nd draft showed that
they had good improvement during the process. They could compose 3rd draft better
than in the 1st draft and 2nd draft (see appendix 16). The teacher’s strategy to use
feedback sheet in their 2nd draft was successful based on the result of their 3rd drafts.
There was only about their language choice produced by students where very
Indonesian style like “…..he every lesson math always present….” It Should be
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“….he always presents in math class ……” This mistake corrected by teacher to
explain the appropriate and encourages students understanding when interaction did.
Even sometimes they still made it mistake both in organization or language use, but
This section is about the result of the student’s writing in the first draft, the
second draft and the third draft in the class that showed in the following chart:
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20
15
draft 1
10
draft 2
5 draft 3
0
verypoor fair to poor good to average excellent to very
good
gives sample evidence that most students’ writing ability is improved under teacher’s
indirect feedback. The number of students is increased in Average to Very good score
in draft 3 and no one is in Very Poor score in draft 3. The same condition also shows
improvement in Fair to Poor and Average to Good score, where in Fair to Poor,
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In Average to Good, there are 7 students in daraft 1, 14 students in draft 2 and 21
students in draft 3. While, In Excellent to Very Good score, there aren’t any students
who achieved good to average score in draft 1, but it increased become 1 student in
draft 2 and 5 students in draft 3. It can be concluded that the target has been achieved,
in this case the students who achieved Average to Good score increased in draft 3
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20
15
draft 1
10 draft 2
5 draft 3
0
verypoor fair to poor good to average excellent to very
good
once again, it gives the strong impression that teacher’s indirect feedback can
improve their writing. In very poor score, there are 9 students in draft 1, 5 students in
draft 2 and 1 student in draft 3. In pair to poor score, there are 18 students in draft 1,
21 students in draft 2 and 11 students in draft 3. In good to average score, there are 3
very good score, there aren’t any students both in draft 1 and draft 2, but there are 2
students in draft 3. From the chart, it can be concluded that numbers of students
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achieved the target “good to average “were increased to be 16 students in draft 3 and
2 students achieved excellent to very good score. Students did improvement in draft 3
From the result in figure 1 and figure 2, it indicates that the application of
4.5 Discussion
The aim of this research was to prove that the students’ ability can be improved
through teacher’s indirect feedback. Beside that it helped students to be a good writer
and become more confidence with their writing, especially in English. That is to
encourage students to learn English through writing. Seeing the students’ draft in
process from the first draft and the third draft, they indicate that there is improvement
first draft. In the first draft, mostly students wrote disorder organization of text and
irrelevant with what they wanted to write. The major problem is the use of language
use, particularly the use of present tense in their composition, word order, word
choice, etc.
Before starting the research, the researcher did pre-observation and the result
was 30 students had two main problems among those five aspects in writing, namely
organization and language use. The researcher conducted the researcher in two
cycles. The first cycle consists of two meeting and students made two drafts. While,
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in the second cycle consists of two meetings and students made their final draft in the
The teacher taught writing by using genre based approach, which consists of
finishing their writing in each meeting, the teacher took those compositions and
provided the feedback. In this study the researcher collaborated with the English
To evaluate the students the teacher and researcher used the evaluation
Language Use. The text used is descriptive text, so the evaluation was based on the
In the first cycle, the researcher found that even though, students had been
taught about the material intensively, the result was After the first cycle was applied,
the students showed improvement in part of organization but it was still far from the
target achieved. The implementation of the first cycle which consists of two meeting
(1st meeting and 2nd meeting) still had problem. In the first draft, Most students still
wrote in disorder organization of text, irrelevant and incorrect language use in the
first meeting (see appendix 14, pg 106). The 2nd meeting, the students made 2nd draft
as revision of 1st draft and some students know how to apply the generic structure on
their writing and could differentiate what sentences should be put in introduction,
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detail description, conclusion. That’s why the researcher conducted the second cycle
to solve this problem. The common mistake that students made were particularly the
use of tenses (simple present tense), pronoun, word order, agreements, possessive,
In the second cycle, there were two meetings (3rd meeting and 4th meeting). In
the third meeting, the students’ were taught more intensively about the language use
in descriptive text and what they should reach in language use. While, in the fourth
meeting, the students rewrote and corrected their previous draft and the result was the
students produced a better result than the first cycle and the result already reached the
target (see draft III in appendix 14, pg 109). So it can be said that this second cycle
can solve students’ writing problem in language use aspect. The result from the first
draft, second draft and the last draft can be seen in appendix 8.
After implementing the action on students’ writing, the researcher found there
feedback. From this result the researcher decided to stop the action because the
analyzed that the students could perform a better writing after taking their draft back
and revising it. The mistakes they had in their writing were more decreased because
their full attention and encouragement to write better and also they were supported by
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The students’ score which achieved by students before and after conducting
action support improvement of this classroom action research. In which the number
of students who achieved Good to Average level of Jacob at al category of writing did
increase. It is before the action is conducted, the students’ numbers who achieved the
target were categorized Good to Average level or score upper 14 only 6 students or
20 % for organization in the first draft, then it increased about 14 students in draft 2
For language use, the improvement also achieved for the students who achieved
target score Good to Average or upper 18 increased from 3 students or 7 % in the first
increased in draft 3. It also can be seen in figure 1 that for organization, the students
who were achieved very poor level consisted of 5 students or 16,6 % in the first draft
and it decreased in the third draft become no student achieved very poor level. While,
for fair to poor level, the students who achieved that category consist of 18 students
For language use, it can be seen in figure 2 that the students who achieved very
poor level consist of 9 students or 30 % in the first draft, 5 students or 16,6% in the
second draft and it decreased in the third draft become 1 students or 3,33 %. While
for fair to poor level, the students who achieved that category consist of 18 students
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or 60 %, 21 students or 70 % in the second draft and it decreased become 11 students
indirect feedback which it applied in two cycles. The researcher agrees by Frodosen
(2001) that indirect feedback indirect feedback is very useful because students are
able to express their ideas more clearly in writing and to get clarification on any
comments that teacher have made. Similarly, Furlgor (2006:34) stated that in indirect
writing. Indirect feedback will increase the students’ ability in writing and the
corrections will be saved in his/her brain in a long time. Moreover, during writing
process, the students were not only taught about how to write but also what the
process when they write, because to compose a good writing, the writers not only
write once but many times. The students as the writers could decrease some mistakes
they always made. it‘s supported by a theory that in this process the student learns to
clauses, obtain a variety of sentences, and use transitional devices (Fox, 1992).
this study the teacher had been placed herself completely to help students. The
teacher was not only had a role as a writing teacher but also she gave direction and
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suggestion to students when looking students writing. It is supported by Seamus
(2008) that there are three distinct roles of teacher, they are as a reader, a writing
First, reader involves interacting with the written work and reacting to the
content and ideas as a simple reader. It might include comments or suggestion. Next,
Writing teacher obviously involves helping students grapple with the writing skill as
a whole and with its different sub-skills such as focusing on genre, working on text
organization and coherence, grammatical skills etc. and the last is Language expert,
here the teacher is in the more traditional role, helping the students with lexis,
grammar, spelling, etc and correcting any problems or other language errors that they
find, in this study the teacher helped the students by giving the feedback to the
students. The students followed the process of writing; it started from pre writing-
editing process. The teacher gave feedback after writing had composed and they
which writers not only polish their style, but also develop their ideas. In this stage, the
teacher helps the students through the revision to shape and reshape the text into final
form.
When they revised, they learn many things from their mistake and how to
correct their mistake. In here, we can see that teacher feedback can positively help the
students to improve their writing. As Ferris suggested that teachers should offer
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indirect rather than direct feedback (marking the error but not correcting it), because
it increases students’ own investment in the process and if students are revising or
rewriting their papers after receiving teacher feedback, they are expected merely to
transcribe the teachers’ suggested corrections into their texts (2002: 19). Even they
sometimes had problem during the process, the researcher and the teacher always
helped them, so that was not only gave them feedback but also guide them to find the
truth and they had more confidence to write and were able to decrease their mistakes
in writing.
The researcher found that by putting directly the feedback symbols is not a
good idea. It happened when the teacher put the symbols on the students’ writing, the
students didn’t understand and the symbols seemed become one with their writing, so
caused this method wasn’t done very well. This become the teacher and researcher’s
problem and in the next cycle the researcher and the teacher tried to solve the
problem by giving feedback sheet to students writing, then the teacher prepared the
According to Clerk et al. (2000) said that by using the feedback sheets, it is
clear that students perceive those divided into criterion-based sections with room for
comments as the most useful. An additional global comment is also seen as highly
valuable or even essential. Feedback forms also accommodate tutors' concerns over
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Moreover, the teacher and researcher prepared the feedback sheet because the
students in the class had common mistake and strength in their writing and an
efficient way of giving feedback is to prepare a written report that is handed out to the
class. This report can detail what the best pieces of writing were like, what the
common errors and weaknesses were, and what to do about them. This sheet also
provides a useful record that can be seen anytime by the teacher and students for later
pieces of writing if the strength and weaknesses are the same or have changed.
The feedback sheet can be seen in appendix 12. The feedback sheet was given
after seeing the students’ result in the second draft. After applying this method the
students were improved, they understood where they did mistakes and discussed it
(Brender, 1998; Fregeau, 1999). Conferencing allows both students and teachers are
chance to trace the causes of the problems arising from student writing and feedback,
grammatical errors (Chandler, 2003). The assistance and feedback given by the
teacher should not be confined to the last stage of the writing process. The marking of
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products should always open more opportunities in which students can redraft their
work. By depriving them of their opportunity for redrafting and reassessing, the
students cannot have the chance of correcting the wrong behavior and re-practicing
In short, writing helps the students to refine the ideas when they receive
feedback, students are able to express their ideas more clearly in writing and to get
clarification on any comments indirectly to their writing that teachers have made.
Finally, teachers can use conferencing to assist students for specific problems related
had been done in this study and it could affect the students and motivated them to
write better than before. The students’ motivation increased when the different way
of teaching writing was applied by the teacher in the classroom. The student were
motivated because they knew that writing can be fun and not difficult anymore as
students’ ability in writing of the first grade in SMA Negeri 9 Kendari was because
the application of teacher’s indirect feedback. The students’ attitude under teacher’s
feedback was good, in which after they were given information about their lack in the
composition, students then found out the right one for their writing by themselves. To
lessen student confusion, teachers can consistently use a standard set of symbols or
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markings to indicate place and type of error and trained the students in what kinds of
corrections will be made based on each symbol as long as the teacher can explain
about the symbols they will used in writing, so the students familiarize themselves
There are also some factors that influence the use of teacher indirect feedback
during this study. First, the researcher found that teacher’s indirect feedback can’t
stand alone and it will be more helpful by feedback sheet. Secondly, teacher’s
feedback has also been found to be effective when it is coupled with student-teacher
conferencing (Brender, 1998; Fregeau, 1999). Students are able to express their ideas
more clearly in writing and to get clarification on any comments that teachers had
made. Thirdly, concerning to teacher’s role as a motivator, in this study also found
unpleasant experience to be corrected and some of learners may get frustrated and
unmotivated because they might not know what to do. That is why teachers have to
inspire and convince learners that teachers welcome their questions and worries.
pursue more (Wright, 1987; Richards & Lockhart, 1996). So, seeing improvement is
motivation, and seeing the same error repeatedly helped students target the mistakes,
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CHAPTER V
5.1 Conclusion
indirect feedback in teaching writing can improve students’ writing quality. It can be
seen on students’ progress during the process. In the first draft, the students started to
make a composition by using descriptive text pattern and they produced disorder
organization and lack in language use although they had been taught about the
generic structure and the language feature of the text. In the second draft, they started
to write a composition by using descriptive text. In here they were already able to
produce good organization after the teacher gave them indirect feedback that showed
their problem in writing, even tough, they were still lack in language use aspect.
Then, they were taught about the language use more intensively and the result is in
the third draft, students had produced good organization and correct language use.
This result shows that the students did improve in their practices.
got score good to average level before and after the action was conducted. Before the
action was conducted, the students who categorized good to average level were 7
students for organization and 3 students for language use. In the other hand, after
students were treated by teacher’s indirect feedback into two cycles, total of the
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students who categorized in good to average level increased become 21 students for
organization and 16 students for language use. From those comparisons, it indicated
5.2 Recommendation
After conducting this study, the researcher offers several recommendations for
1. For the next researcher who wants to conduct the same design, may conduct
the study in the same level by using different kind of feedback. The researcher
also may take the other aspect of writing of descriptive text because this study
2. The next researcher who wants to take the same approach for the same level,
she/ he may take other kinds of genre because in this study, the focus is
descriptive text.
3. For teacher, especially teachers of SMU Negeri 9 Kendari, it is better for them
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Appendix 1
Teaching Material
Descriptive text a text which says what a person or a thing is like or to provide
enough vivid detail to help the reader create a mental picture of what is being written
life, and also to help a writer develop an aspect of their work, for example to
create a particular mood, atmosphere or describe a place so that the reader can
Generic Structure
characteristics. They may choose vivid, fresh language, they may use
their senses
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Language Feature.
The language uses of this text should rely on precisely chosen vocabulary
with carefully chosen adjectives and adverbs, It is focused and concentrated only on
the aspects that add something to the main purpose of the description. Sensory
description - what is heard, seen, smelt, felt, tasted. Precise use of adjectives, similes,
experience that "puts the reader there" focuses on key details, powerful verbs and
precise nouns, Using attributive and identifying process, Using adjective and
(Adopted from LKS GITA II for Senior High School, publisher: PT.
Pabelan)
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Appendix 2
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- Asks students
suggestion about the topic - respond the teacher
to be composed request
(describing important
person in their life)
- Asks the students to - students deliver their
deliver their idea to the ideas (white in
class by writing at the whiteboard)
whiteboard
- Revises the structure by - students deliver their
comparing with the model idea about better
and asking students’ structure composition
suggestion about the
composition - deliver their idea in
- Guided students to composing writing
compose a descriptive text
(first draft)
Post - teacher concludes the student pay attention 5
activity manterial
- teacher inform the next
subject
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LESSON SCENARIO OF CYCLE I (SECOND MEETING)
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- During the process the
teacher keep watching
their activity
Post - Teacher collects the - Respond and collect
activity students composition their composition
- Teacher concludes the Student pay attention
5
material
- Teacher informs the
next subject
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Appendix 3
LESSON SCENARIO OF CYCLE 2 (THIRD MEETING)
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- The teacher inform and have question about
explain the symbols will the material.
be used for the next draft
- Teacher distribute the - Pay attention to the
new feedback sheet teacher.
containing with the
symbols and ask the - Students pay
students to learn it attention to the
feedback sheet and
prepare their question
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LESSON SCENARIO OF CYCLE 2 (FORTH MEETING)
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- During the process the
teacher keep watching
their activity
Post - Teacher collects the - Respond and collect
activity students composition their composition
- Teacher asks students the - Students give their
conclusion. 10
conclusion about what
they are performed
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Appendix 4 : Model Text
Borobudur Temple
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Appendix 5 Students Assignment Sheet
Class ___________
Make a descriptive text about your family or the most important person in your life in
three or more paragraphs. Each paragraph consists of four or more sentences.
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Appendix 6. Component of ESL Composition Profile (organization and language
use)
Language use Effective complex Are sentences well-formed and complete, with
construction appropriate complements?
Are single-word modifiers appropriate to
function? Properly formed, placed and
sequenced?
Are the introductory it and there used correctly
to begin sentences and clauses
Are main and subordinate elements linked to
other elements with appropriate conjunctions,
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adverbial, relative pronouns or punctuation?
Are sentence types and length varied?
Are elements parallel?
Are techniques of substitutes, repetition, and
deletio0n used effectively?
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Appendix 7 OBSERVATION SHEET
no
Students’ Activity Yes No
1 Pay attention to the teacher .
2 Students receive their draft .
3 Pay attention to the receipt draft and focus on the feedback .
4 Students focus on teacher’s explanation .
5 Students asked some questions .
6 Students write the draft .
7 Respond and collect their composition .
8 Student pay attention .
9 Students collect their draft to the teacher .
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b. 2nd Meeting
Teacher’s Activity Yes No
1 Teacher Introduces the topic to the class and .
planning class today
2 Teacher distributes students’ first draft that had .
been writen before action
3 Teacher asks the students to pay attention and .
focus to the indirect feedback given to their
draft
4 Teacher gives students a chance to ask .
questions
5 Teacher expalains their lack in their .
composition
6 Teacher asks the students to write second draft .
based on their previous draft referring to the
indirect teacher’s feedback.
7 During the process the teacher keep watching .
their activity
8 Teacher collects the students composition .
9 Teacher concludes the material .
10 Teacher informs the next subject .
no
Students’ Activity Yes No
1 Students pay attention to the teacher .
2 The students take their draft .
3 Students pay attention to the receipt draft and focus on the .
feedback
4 Students respond teacher’s request .
5 Students pay attention to the teacher .
6 Students write the draft .
7 Students respond and collect their composition .
8 Student pay attention teacher conclusion .
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2. Second cycle (CYCLE 2)
c. 3rd Meeting
Teacher’s Activity Yes No
1 Introduces the topic to the class and .
planning class today
2 Teacher presents one of students’ .
composition in white board that used as
the sample of giving feedback
3 Students inform their lack in 2nd draft .
about language use.
4 Teacher explain the students’ lack in .
their composition.
5 Teacher focus on the explanation of .
language use and organization of
descriptive text.
6 The teacher inform and explain the .
symbols will be used for the next draft
7 Teacher distribute the new feedback .
sheet containing with the symbols
8 The teacher explained about the .
feedback sheet
9 teacher concludes the material .
10 teacher inform the next subject .
no
Students’ Activity Yes No
1 Pay attention to the teacher .
2 students pay attention .
3 students deliver their opinion about the .
composition
4 students pay attention to their handed draft .
5 Students ask if they have question about the .
material.
6 Students pay attention to the feedback sheet .
7 Students ask the teacher about the feedback sheet .
8. Students concentrates to the teacher’s .
explanation
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d. 4th Meeting
Teacher’s Activity Yes No
1 Teacher Introduces the topic to the .
class and planning class today
2 Teacher distributes students’ second .
drafts
3 Teacher asks the students to pay .
attention and focus to the indirect
feedback given to their draft
4 Teacher re-explains about the .
material
5 Teacher gives students a chance to .
ask questions
6 Teacher expalains their lack in their .
composition
7 Teacher asks the students to write the .
third draft based on their previous
draft referring to the indirect
teacher’s feedback on the feedback
sheet.
8 During the process the teacher keep .
watching their activity
9 Teacher collects the students .
composition
10 Teacher asks students the conclusion .
about what they are performed
no
Students’ Activity Yes No
1 Students pay attention to the teacher .
2 The students take their draft .
3 Students pay attention to the receipt draft and focus .
on the feedback.
4 Students respond teacher’s request .
5 Pay attention to the teacher .
6 Students write the draft and pay attention to the .
feedback sheet.
7 Respond and collect their composition .
8 Students give their conclusion. .
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Appendix 9
Resp. Org LU X
1 11 13 24
2 13 16 29
3 14 14 28
4 13 14 27
5 12 13 25
6 12 14 26
7 8 7 15
8 10 11 21
9 14 16 30
10 14 15 29
Σ 254
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Two rater Computation Result
Resp. X Y X2 Y2 XY
1 24 22 576 484 528
2 29 28 841 784 812
3 28 29 784 841 812
4 27 26 729 676 702
5 25 25 625 625 625
6 26 25 676 625 650
7 15 16 225 256 240
8 21 21 441 441 441
9 30 28 900 784 840
10 29 32 841 1024 928
Σ 254 252 6638 6540 6578
(Σ X)2 & (ΣY)2 64516 63504
{ N ∑ xy − ( ∑ x )( ∑ y ) }
rxy =
{ N ∑ x 2 − ( ∑ x ) 2 }{ N ∑ y 2 − ( ∑ y ) 2}
10 (6578 ) − ( 254 )( 252 )
= (10 (6638 ) − (64516 ))( 10 (6540 ) − (63504 ))
65780 − 64008
= (1844 )(1896 )
1772
=
3496224
1772
= 1869 ,819
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Appendix 10 Field Note
Cycle 1
1st Meeting on Saturday, 23rd 2008.
1. Teacher explained the activities and the material to the students after
distributing the copy of material, symbols of indirect feedback and
marking scheme of writing.
2. Teacher explained about the organization of the text, language use and
descriptive text to the students.
3. Students paid attention when teacher explained the material.
4. Students didn’t understand about the symbols used will be used.
5. Teacher explained what kind of symbols they will get in their writing.
6. Teacher asked students to write 1st draft about descriptive text.
7. Students wrote composition based on teacher’s instruction.
8. During the process of writing, some students asked the teacher about
vocabulary and sometimes checked their sentences.
9. During the process, some students also seemed not seriously following
the instruction to write a composition.
10. Only few students brought dictionary and it caused student walked
around the class to find the dictionary.
11. Students unfocussed did their writing because they spent their time to
chat instead of writing.
12. Teacher asked them to submit their writing.
13. Teacher put the indirect feedback in every error in students’ writing.
14. Students submitted the writings and paid attention to the next explanation
from the teacher.
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7. Teacher asked the students to revise the 1st.
8. Students wrote 2nd draft as a revision from draft 1 based on the teacher’s
indirect feedback.
9. During the process, some students still walked around the class to find a
dictionary to their friends or came close to the teacher and researcher to
ask some words in English.
10. Teacher monitored students activity and help them when the students got
difficulties
11. Students collected their 2nd compositions.
12. The teacher reminded them to bring dictionary next meeting and their
dictionary will be checked.
Cycle 2
3rd Meeting on Tuesday, September 2nd, 2008
1. Teacher explained that Students got improvement in their organization but
still had problem on language use after writing the 2nd draft.
2. The teacher distributed the copy of their 2nd draft that hadn’t give feedback
and they had to give it back to the teacher in the end of meeting.
3. The students paid attention to their draft and the teacher’s explanation.
4. Teacher re-explained about the material and their lack in
part of language use and introduced the feedback sheet.
5. Students shared to the teacher about kind of difficulties during writing
their draft.
6. Teacher kept encouraging students to write in a good organization and
improved their confidence in writing.
7. Students didn’t walk around the class because they already brought their
own dictionary but there were still one or three students who did it.
8. Students tried to check their mistakes through the copies.
9. Teacher reminds the students that they should pay attention to language
use aspects they used (e.g. tenses, words, punctuation, conjunction, etc).
10. The student seemed enthusiasm to follow the process because they could
investigate their own mistakes.
11. The students gave the draft back to the teacher.
1. Teacher informed to the students that she would distribute their draft
2. Two students helped distributing the drafts.
3. The students saw their draft and their feedback sheets.
4. Teacher re-explained the important point related to the material before
asking students to perform.
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5. Students seemed interested to look their mistake and match with the
feedback.
6. Students asked the students about how to use the feedback sheet in the
next draft.
7. After answering the questions, the teacher asked the students to compose
3rd draft based on the feedback given
8. During the process, all Students didn’t walk around again the class
because they brought dictionaries.
9. The teacher kept watching and walk around the class to control the class.
10. The students sometimes still asked about difficulties vocabularies.
11. Students were enjoying their action because they got
improvement after their writings were checked.
12. Students got more confidence to write than in previous cycle and they
seemed serious writing the composition.
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Appendix 11 Correction codes on student’s writing
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Appendix 12 Feedback Sheet
Note: if you don’t understand, you can meet me in the office or contact me!!!!
(silahkan hubungi saya jika ada pertanyaan!!!)
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Appendix 13 Student’s writing assignment
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Appendix 14 Students’ Composition
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Appendix 15 students’ composition
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