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There was nothing on Mars.
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Then the spaceship came down.
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Then the spaceship opened.
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The Rover came out.
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Then the Rover got around the rocks.
Then it looked inside a rock.
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Then they go up the mountains.
The alien pops out.
The other alien pops up.
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Then the spaceship goes back to Earth.
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It lands on Earth.
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There was nothing on Mars.
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Then the spaceship came down.
The spaceship came from Earth with fire coming from the bottom of the spaceship.
It sounded like an earthquake.
It came from the space centre.
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Then the spaceship opened.
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The Rover came out.
From the spaceship the Rover comes out like a slow worm.
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Then the Rover got around the rocks.
Then it looked inside a rock.
The wheels slowly move down and the Rover starts looking for rocks.
The Rover takes pictures so the people on Earth can see how Mars looks.
what Mars looks like.
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Then they go up the mountains.
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It lands on Earth.
“Phew… The space ship has come back.” sighed the people at the space centre.