Section B: Writing

Section B at a glance
a letter (informal or
formal)
a report
an article
a leaflet
a speech
a review
Aim to write 1 1/2
sides.
Remember FLAP
(FORM,
LANGAUAGE,
AUDENCE,
PURPOSE)
Letter Writing
nformal Letter
Read the question carefully.
Set out the letter correctly.
Plan your work carefully.
Make sure that your tone is appropriate.
Take care with your punctuation and
spelling.
Structure
Your address
Date
Greeting (Dear John,)
Short introductory paragraph (including purpose
of letter)
Three or four paragraphs that cover the points
(one point per paragraph)
Final paragraph rounds off the purpose of the
letter.
nformal closure (Love from)
Your first name.
magine you have a friend who has decided to run in the
London Marathon (a distance of over 26 miles).
Write a Ietter to your friend or reIative, giving your
opinions. (16 marks)
15 Maindy Road, Cardiff, CF5 2YW
16
th
June 2008
Dear Hannah,
hope you had a good holiday. know you needed a relaxing break but then
heard that the first thing you do on your return from Spain is to enter for the
London Marathon! Mind can't say 'm surprised knowing you as do.
know could not talk you out of it, no matter how hard tried. You're too stubborn.
So 'm offering some advice so that you won't end up with any injuries that you
always seem to get.
Firstly, know you think that 26 miles will be no problem but you really should train.
don't mean just walking to the end of your garden and back. Eat fruit and
vegetables. know sound like your Nan, but it really does give you more energy
than crisps and chocolate. would also suggest that you should drink water rather
than those energy drinks. want to say that am very proud of you. t may not
sound like am but it is only that am worried about you. know that you will reach
your goal because you are so determined and am sure you will be fine.
Before you ask will sponsor you. think it is great you are showing such initiative
and raising money for Save the Children. Good luck and keep up the good work.
Love,
Lillian
C Targets
Well set out.
Well organised.
Friendly tone.
Generally accurate.
More ambitious.
ncluded more detail.
Was better organised.
Built up the points a bit
more.
Said more about the
actual event.
Did a bit more to capture
the tone of a friend writing
to a friend.
Dear Hannah,
hope you had a good holiday in sunny Spain and that you had a really relaxing time.
knew you needed a good break after all the stress of your recent examinations
but typical of you, you then decide to enter the London marathon. You must be
mad!
When first heard about this was tempted to try to talk you out of it but
knowing what a determined character you are quickly realised that would be a
waste of time. nstead am going to offer you a bit of advice because wouldn't
want to see a really good friend doing herself an injury you know how accident
prone you are.
You do realise that a marathon is over 26 miles long don't you? The best
runners can do it in just over two hours but it is going to take you a lot longer than
that, in fact, at least twice as long and probably longer. Now am not trying to put
you off but you will have to train really hard over the next few weeks and don't
mean walking to the bottom of your garden and back. Eat the right foods which will give you
the energy you'll need and try to resist crisps and chocolate. Before and during the race
drink plenty of water and don't worry too much about those energy drinks not sure how
effective they are really. Also try to avoid dressing up in heavy costumes the race is hard
enough without all that extra weight and want to be able to pick you out in the crowd.
know sound a bit like your Nan but don't mean to. really hope that things go
well and am sure that you will complete the race and raise a lot of money for Save the
Children, your favourite charity. Before you ask will, of course, sponsor you. All the best for
the big day. can't wait to talk to you about what will be a marvellous experience. 'll look out
for you on the tele.
Love,
Lilian.
You can see that the basic letter is still there but this
one:
is better organised
is more detailed
builds up the points a bit more
says more about the actual event
does a bit more to capture the tone of a friend writing to a
friend
is largely accurate.
Write a letter to a friend who has moved to another area to live, giving
him / her news that he / she would be interested in. (16 marks)
Remember to;
set your letter out properly;
plan your paragraphs;
adopt the right tone;
take care with spelling, grammar and punctuation.
Formal Letter
Layout The recipient's address.
Dear Sir / Madam, Dear Editor, Dear Mrs
Thomas.
Ending Yours sincerely / Yours faithfully.
Business like tone.
A local businessman has applied for permission to hold
an outdoor music festival in your area.
Write a Ietter to your IocaI newspaper either
supporting or opposing this idea. (20)
Dear Sir,
am writing in responce to Mr Palmer's letter suggesting to hold and outdoor music festival.
am writing to say agree with the idea.
The first reason agree is because love music and it sounds like a fun idea it will also bring
a lot of intrest to our area and may convince some people to move here.
The second is because lots of local businesses will benefit from this festival local shops that
sell food and drink should do well and if Mr Palmer uses a local catering firm they will benefit
as well. So hopefully the festival will bring in lots of revenue for local business.
My third reason is that it will bring in people from all over. Some people would say that's a
bad thing others that it give's the local people a chance to make new friends.
My forth and final reason is that the festival will highlight how good are area is at holding
such events and would attract more festivals and concerts and may even gain an annual
one which will create lots of revenue and boost are areas and towns economy.
To those who would say its going to be to loud or we will have drunks everywhere would
say no we won't because it's only at a few concerts that you get that and that if it is planned
well there should be no trouble.
So to conclude am for this festival mainly because think it will raise lot's of revenue for
businesses and open the door to an annual event.
Yours sincerly,
David Lloyd
Address Address
D Targets
Quite well set out.
Wrong closure.
Paragraphs
Decent case.
No date
Spelling.
Punctuation.
Less awkward in
places.
Get rid of repetition.
Rewrite the letter addressing the targets.
Report Writing
What is a report and what should it
do?
Gives information to create better
understanding.
Advise, perhaps persuade and make
recommendations.
mportant Features of a Report
Format organise your work.
(Appropriate main heading and sub-
heading).
Audience dentify the audience carefully.
Tone Make sure it matches your
audience.
Helpful Structure and Sentence
Starters
Give your report a title,
eg, #eport into
ntroduction This
report examines /
investigates / explores..
Heading 1
Heading 2
Heading 3
Conclusion This
report concludes.
t is evident that.
t is clear that..
t is obvious that.
t is necessary that..
The priority should be.
AVOD USNG I, YOU,
WE!
Write a report for the governors of your school
on the out-of-school activities available to the
students. (20)
am issuing this report on out of school activities because of the trouble and
kaos some children get up to. know that the children are not your
responsibility out of school hours but thought you could do something to help
for example holding a youth club once or twice a week. t doesn't have to be
run by teachers and it could be a great way for the school to earn money for
itself or other organisations. The school could also arrange other events such
as discos or trips to places. Not only does this keep children of the streets it
also gives them the opportunity to make new friends. Also there should be
other school activities eg, netball, football where all pupils are invited to
watch.
am sure that you are all aware of the graffiti and what some children get up
to. That's why 'm sure you will be interested in my ideas. This scheme will
do the community good and many people will be grateful to you. But mainly it
will get the children off the streets and somewhere safe. This scheme could
also decrease the crime level. Plus the school could benifit lots as well.
hope you take this report into consideration.
What subheadings could be used in this report?
D Targets
Clearly written with focus
on task.
Spelling errors.
Polite tone.
Some sensible points.
Layout doesn't look like
a report.
Points not very well
organised.
Headings and
paragraphs needed.
An introduction explaining
clearly what the report is
about.
A more effective
conclusion.
Reorganise and redevelop the
student's report.
Possible headings;
Why the report is being presented;
The present situation;
Facilities / activities to improve the
situation;
Benefits that will follow;
conclusion
Write a report about your school's facilities for
the student council to consider..
aciIities at . SchooI
Equipment
We have had loads of equipment over the last two years and now feel as though we
no longer need any equipment (apart from the usual things i.e. paper and books).
We have had new televisions, videos, stereos and computers. We have lived up to
our name 'Technology College'.
acilities
All of our facilities are O.K. But we feel that the P.E. department should be updated
or new equipment bought. We think this because the P.E. department is one of the
oldest and it could do with having a re-paint as paint is coming off the walls. Also
some of the hockeysticks are wrecked in some way. And the tennis raquets are now
practically unuseable. Apart from that all our other facilities are used very often.
Buildings
We all know that this school is old. But we feel that it is starting to look a bit tatty. For
example when you walk past the front of the school it looks dull. t looks as if very
little has been done to clean it over the past two years.
#ange of Subjects
We have enjoyed a very wide range of subjects covering from art to physics. The
one thing lacking is languages. We do French but that is all. What about Spanish or
talian? From recent questionaires it seems that there is a demand.
Out of School Activities
There could be more. We have sports clubs but that's about it. We could do with a
wider range and try to involve the community in them.
C Targets
On task, clearly
presented.
Headings are used.
Reasonable standard of
accuracy.
an introductory paragraph
taking more care with
sentences, e.g. at the
beginning of the sections
headed 'Facilities' and 'Buildings'
checking spellings such as
'raquets', 'unuseable' and
'questionaire'
developing some of the points
made such as in the last
section giving
examples of worthwhile out-of-
school activities
making it a little less casual, e.g.
'loads of equipment'
writing a conclusion with some
recommendations.
Your school or college is concerned about the
facilities for the disabled.
Your head teacher or principal has asked you for a
report outlining what has already been done to help
the disabled and suggesting improvements.
Remember to complete a paragraph plan
before you write your report!
Your town or district has received a grant to improve
local facilities.
Write a report to the local council suggesting how this
money could be spent to benefit the community.
Your school or college has decided to hold a "Charity
Fun Day.
The head teacher or principal has asked you to write
a report to him / her suggesting which two charities
you think should benefit, and why. Write your report.
Articles for Magazines and
Newspapers
Articles
To inform and, in most cases, to entertain.
Look carefully at the wording of the
question.
f help is given in bullet points use it.
Follow the instructions about the length of
your answer.
Filling about one to two pages in your answer book,
write a lively article with the title, "The Joys of Exercise
for a magazine for people of your age. (20)
Ever wondered what the point of it all is? You spend endless hours sweating
pints, out of breathe, sick and nauseous and for what? A slightly slimmer figure;
that's all! hate the thought of feeling as if someone was strangling my lungs,
squeezing every last breath from may aching body. feel dizzy at the thought of it
all. And yet why do do it, hear you ask? Well, it's simply this: because the
experts say so. Surely it would make a little more sense to diet to shed those last
few pounds instead? But no we need to exercise to stay healthy. They say 30
minutes of exercise a day can help you keep n shape. f only it was as simple as
that. Of course, they fail to mention that despite all this excrutiating exercise, we
have to watch what we eat as well. Or rather what we don't eat which by
today's standards is pretty much everything! So again, ask why do we do it? Ok
so fair enough maybe the evidence does say we should cause ourselves a heart
attack or two exercising, in the name of keeping fit.but wonder why we really
put ourselves through such agony? think its this. ts not for statistics. ts not to
know that we should run half a mile without stopping, should we need to it's for
our own self esteem. We feel proud to say we can swim that extra length. We're
chuffed to be able to run up and down the stairs without losing our puff. And we
can finally have that confidence to strip off into our bathers and not worry about
what everyone else is thinking of us. So this summer take it upon yourself to fitten
up. t may not be fun but it is sure fantastic to see the end result. Occupy
yourself with something constructive this summer get fit.
B Targets
Sounds like an article.
Lively and interesting.
Good sense of audience.
Use of questions to
involve the reader.
Exclamation marks to
indicate tone.
Some informal language,
"we're chuffed.
Paragraphs!
Spelling and punctuation
errors.
Write a lively article for a newspaper or magazine on
the subject of the eating habits of the British. You may
use your own ideas but you can also consider one or
more of the following:
"Typical British food / non-British food.
Healthy eating / junk food.
Vegetarianism.
Eating in / out
Write about one to two sides in your answer book.
(24)
What Happened To Proper Cooking?
What do you think is the typical British meal? Roast beef with roasted potatoes and
veg.? Or chicken tikka massala from the ndian place down the road? Never has
there been such diversity in British taste. Bombarded from all around by the garish
attraction of burgers and fried chicken, compared to grandma's dreary Sunday
roast, you might have thought that the battle for children to eat healthily had been
lost, but no: give them some delicious pasta instead or the attractively packed carrot
chunks you get in supermarkets.
The culinary habits of the British never used to be up to much, but look at us now.
Noone would even question the fact that balti and beer is now our favourite dish.
The broadening of our palates, the increasingly varied food that we eat must be
good things surely? Not necessarily. n the process of discovering all these new
foods, we've forgotten how to cook.
A staggering percentage of people now eat out most nights of the week. People may
want to show off their new designer kitchens, but often they have no idea how to
use them. A famous chef was heard to remark 'The thing most often used in the
modern kitchen is the microwave. People may have the most expensive kitchens
but in the end all they use them for is to microwave last night's Big Mac'.
So is convenience and economic boom ruining cooking? Will our great British
stodge puddings disappear for good? This reporter thinks that the microwave is here
to stay.
A
sounds like an article
answers the question
well organised
lively, interesting and entertaining
accurately and ambitiously written.
A magazine is running a series of articles for parents under
the title "An Enjoyable Day Out for the family.
Write an articIe recommending a pIace to visit, and
expIaining its appeaI to aII the famiIy. You might think
about a town, a seaside resort, a theme park or a
museum, but you are free to make your own choice.
(24)
Plan what you want to say.
Organise your work into paragraphs.
Make it interesting.
Think of your audience and how you should write for it.
Write accurately.
Be creative.
Write an article for a newspaper magazine entitles
"Teenage Trends. You might like to think about tends
in music, fashion etc. (24)
Write an article for a teenage magazine entitled "Compulsory Sport
in Schools. Describe the present situation and then give your
honest opinion of what is offered and whether big changes are
needed. (24)
Write an article for a newspaper or magazine under
the title "Young People Today. (24)
Write an article for a newspaper or magazine on a
place that is well worth visiting. (24)
Leaflets
Leaflets
A neat and effective way of giving information or
of advertising.
Purpose to inform, advise, persuade.
No marks for drawing pictures.
Need to adapt your writing to match the
audience.
Adopt the right tone and style.
Headings are enough of an indication of layout
(possibly indicate where pictures would go).
Your school or college is running a campaign during its
"Healthy Eating week to persuade students to buy and
eat more fruit. t has asked you to produce a leaflet
that will be given out in the dining hall.
Write your IeafIet. (24)
Healthy Eating
Eating healthily doesn't have to be uncool.
This week a wide range of healthy foods,
optional of course, will be available to
students.
Don't be pressured into not eating healthy
foods by friends, think of all the people they
look up to such as maybe a famous
footballer or netball player.
How do you think they keep in good
shape?
Well, my friend, it's all down to their diet
and exercise, eating fruit can give you the
energy you need for a good workout and to
keep you fit.
Sports can become a major problem during
your school life and so can your size.
Eating fruit and vegetables is good for your
skin and can help get rid of spots.
For those of you lads in school
during PE who are trying to tone
up those muscles, why stress
when you can concentrate on a
healthy diet giving you the energy
you need for a good work out and
gradually building up your
muscles.
How do you think a physical
trainer builds up their muscles
and ends up looking like this.
Pictures of physicaI trainer.
Eating healthily isn't always for
the uncool and the less popular
people so think wisely about what
you ea whether your friends like it
or not.
C Targets
Focused on task.
Organised.
Appropriate tone.
Sense of audience.
Clarity.
Sub headings.
Develop points in
more detail.
Leaflet: Successful Features.
A heading that makes it clear what the
leaflet is about.
Subheadings or sections so that
information can be easily located.
Bullet points these help make it look
more attractive.
An appropriate tone.
A good sense of audience.
You have been asked to produce a leaflet to persuade people
in your area to be more careful about litter and waste. Write
your leaflet. You may wish o indicate where you would use
illustrations, but you will be rewarded for the quality of your
writing, not your illustrations. (24)
Your local junior school has invited you to produce a
leaflet about the importance of a healthy lifestyle aimed
at ten and eleven year olds. The leaflet should be
informative and persuasive. Write your leaflet. (24)
Writing a speech
Speech / talk / radio phone-in
Good features of a speech
Start by addressing the audience.
Make the subject clear.
Well organised.
Points made clearly.
nteresting information to support points.
Holds the attention of the audience.
Conclusion
Acknowledgement of audience, "Thank you for
listening."
As part of your 'speaking and listening' activities you have to
prepare a class talk. You have decided to talk about the use of
mobile phones in schools. Write your talk.
Fellow pupils, have chosen as the topic of my talk today a subject we seem to read and hear a
lot about. Mobile phones.
These have been around now for a long time but still the argument goes on whether we should
be allowed to bring our phones to school. As with most things there are points for and against.
will start with the downside. Teachers say that they distract us from our work. They say that
we are more interested in text messages than we are in our school texts and preparing for our
GCSEs. They also say that it is not acceptable to have phones go off in the middle of the
lesson. Wee, disagree with the first but agree with the second. t's not fair to say that they
stop us working but obviously we can't have a situation where ring tones are interrupting the
teaching. There is, though, an easy solution all phones to be switched off during lesson time
(and that includes the teacher's phones). Another point made is that mobiles can be used to
help pupils cheat in exams.
Yes there are issues but there are also a lot of real advantages. f our parents want to contact
us urgently then they can do so. This has happened to me and don't know what would have
done without my mobile.
To sum up think as know most of you do that mobiles have more good points than bad ones.
Yes they are abused by the odd person here and there but most of us use them responsibly.
We can't go on living in the past. We have to use modern technology to our advantage. f we
don't then just look what happened to the dinosaurs.
Thank you very much for listening.
A
On task.
Strong sense of audience.
Strong sense of purpose.
Persuasive techniques used, eg,
repetition.
Clearly organised.
Accurate.
Writing a speech: Tips
Adopt an appropriate tone.
Use rhetorical devices, eg, I'm sure you
will agree.It is often claimed that.
Use humour if appropriate.
Use statistics sparingly.
Use personal experience.
Don't be afraid to be controversial.
Your debating society in school intends to discuss the
subject of boxing. You have been asked to contribute.
The audience will be fellow students. Write what you
would say. (24)
Remember to complete a
paragraph plan before writing
your speech!
You have been asked to prepare a talk / speech to
be presented to your class on a subject of your
choice. Write what you would say. (20)
Review Writing
Key Points: A Review
A critical opinion of a book, film, a piece of music or CD,
a television programme, play, etc.
t needs a suitable heading, usually the name of the film,
or the name of the book and its author, or the name of
the CD and the performer etc.
nclude an introduction.
Finally, there will be an overall opinion and
recommendation.
Star rating.
Audience can be specific, eg, young people, public
generally (anyone interested in that genre etc).
Write a review of a book, film or music CD for a magazine
which is read by people of your age. (24)
Your review should include;
details about the book, film or CD you have chosen
comments on its strengths, if any
comments on its weaknesses, if any
a clear recommendation.
TLC's 3D
The R 'n' B multi platinum trio girl group have released their final album as tribute to
the lost group member Lisa Lopes who dies in a car accident last year. The album
contains a wide range of music styles such as; R 'n' B, hip-hop. Reggae, rap and
even blues. TLC hope to blow up the charts with newly released tracks "Girls Talk,
"Hands Up and "Quickie.
The album has many strengths with many power ballad and soulful tracks making it
a must have album. The tracks are all different with different messages about life
which is important to youths of today. Even with the loss of a member the album
still packs some great beats and lyrics.
However, the death of Lisa has effected the album on its rap content because she
was the main rapper so the album contains hardly no rap which is a downfall as
TLC albums were known for the hard core rap in their songs.
Overall the album is great, worth the money and finalizes a decade of music by one
of the world's greatest female groups. And what a way they went out, despite the
damage to them they got back on their feet and left a mark on the music industry.
TLC 3D out now in most record stores. Buy now before they geet sold out.
C Targets
Sounds like a music
review.
Well organised uses
bullet points from
question.
Sense of intended
audience.
Effective touches, eg,
"must have album,
"packs some great
beats.
Needs full stops not
commas in places.
Second to last
paragraph is clumsy.
Some errors.
Write your own music review. (24)
Write a review of either a film you really enjoyed, or
one you really disliked, for teenage readers. Base
your work on a film you have actually seen! (24)
Hot Reviews. Star Wars is back
Yes you heard it right the final Star Wars film was released
yesterday and went along to see what the fuss was about.
The final Star Wars film Revenge of the Sith was again
made by the famous George Lucas and this end chapter in
the Star Wars saga blew it out with a bang. With amazing
graphics and loads of fight scenes revenge of the Sith
promises to be the best yet.
All the characters are back such as Anakin Skywalker
played by Hansel Christian, Obi One Kanobi played by Ewan
McGregor and the famous Yoga.
The sum up of the story is basically Anakin turns to
the dark side with the help of the chancellor and Padama
is pregnant with twins. The story comes to an end with a
dramatic finish but youll have to wait and see it to find out
more.
This film promises to get you excited and on the edge of
your seat throughout with the only weakness knowing that
there will be no more. Grab your ticket and get zoomed in
galactic adventure. Enjoy.
A
Starts well.
Upbeat and grabs the reader's attention.
Good sense of audience.
Writer is very familiar with her chosen subject. She was obviously
impressed, using words like 'amazing' and 'best'. She gives you
the gist of what happens but does not say too much so that
your enjoyment isn't spoilt.
The review finishes well, leaving you wanting to see the film.
High level of accuracy (lacks inverted commas around film's name,
small 'r' in 'revenge,' apostrophe ' you'll.').
Error in the second to last line 'zoomed in' (into).
Write a review of either a film you really enjoyed, or
one you really disliked, for teenage readers. Base
your work on a film you have actually seen! (24)
Write a review of a book you have read recently.
Your review is intended for a teenage magazine.
This may be a book that you enjoyed, one you
disliked, or one you have mixed feelings about. (24)
Book Review
Choose a book you know well - one you have read recently.
Your heading will be the title of the book and the author's name.
Write an introductory paragraph about the type of book
being reviewed, with perhaps some detail about the author.
Write two or three paragraphs, giving a flavour of the book
and the readers for whom it is intended.
Write a final paragraph giving your overall view and
recommendation.
The Da Vinci Code' by Dan Brown
(published by Corgi)
Having been told by friends about this 'amazing new book' they had just read
thought it was time to read it. After months of telling everyone would pick up the
book the next time was in Waterstones, my sister handed her dog-eared copy to
me with the simple instruction 'Read it.'
And thank God did. This book really deserves all the hype it gets. A truly exciting
and unpredictable plot combined with believable characters and lots of riddles left
me eager for more. was also feeling pleased with myself as found myself
sussing out the final two codes before the main characters did, not to speak of
having completed a six hundred page book. even started telling all around me
everything 'd learned from the book, some of which may surprise the devout
Christians among you (if you choose to believe it of course).
My one moan about the novel is that it is too long. 'm not saying this out of sheer
laziness. This is coming from someone who read the new Harry Potter book in
under seven hours, and that was a monster of a book. t's just that the book itself
(hardback copy anyway) is so heavy ended up with wrist ache trying to hold the
thing up. Having said that you get a great sense of satisfaction when you've
finished it.
Would recommend it? Certainly. loved this book, and while Mum and Dad
moaned at me 'Do some revision' as read it, could claim to be revising R.E. in
the process. Use those expiring book tokens Aunty Mabel sent you for Christmas
and go out and buy it. You'll thank me for it later (and your wrists will be much
stronger too).
A*
Notice how the student has answered the question set and the
attention given to the audience: peopIe of your own age.
Though this student has answered the question in her own
individual way this review follows the structure indicated above:
it has a heading
it has an introductory paragraph
it gives a flavour of what the book is about
it describes what makes it enjoyable
it has a final paragraph giving an overall opinion and
recommendation.
Write a review of a book you have read recently.
Your review is intended for a teenage magazine.
This may be a book that you enjoyed, one you
disliked, or one you have mixed feelings about. (24)