Name: Ansh

Date: 11/3/13

Rewriting Frankenstein
How can your environments impact who you are and the choices you make? Pick one of the following scenes from the play. Think about how the situation affected the Monster. Think about how if the scene unfolded differently, the Monster may have changed. Rewrite one of the following to show how they would have impacted the Monster and his choices in life if the situation had been different. 1. 2. 3. 4. When Frankenstein sees the monster for the first time and his reaction is to run away When the monster is in a town, where dogs and towns people are after him When Felix shoots the monster When the monster kills William

Your scene should have between 2-4 characters. 1 or 2 of these characters may be your own characters (not from the play). Your scene will have two parts: 1. What happens to the monster (the situation) 2. His choices as a result (the impact) Which scene will you rewrite? Im going to rewrite scene 1 What is the situation in the scene? What do others How does this affect the Monster? What impact does do to the Monster? it have on his life? What choices does he make as a result? Frankenstein just created this experiment where he made a monster come alive (from a dead person.) He The monster feels very sad and angry (mad) because was first trying to make an angel by turning a dead everyone hates him, he has no friends and he only person to a human being he turned it into an ugly wanted everyone to like him but it turned out as looking monster. everyone keeps on hitting him ( if they see him.) Others start to hate him and treat him very bad such He chose to take revenge on Frankenstein since all as everyone hitting him etc. of this happened because of him. Frankenstein just abandoned him because of his looks (as everyone did.) Since everyone treated him very badly he realized that he wants to be this bad after he was treated badly. If Frankenstein didnt take good care of him this wouldnt have happened.

How will you change the situation? How might things happen differently during the scene? I will change it by having Frankenstein create an angel but forgot to add the most important chemical to make it but he realized he used the chemical which destroys angels. Then he remembered that Clerval had this special chemical which could make the angel. Frankenstein suddenly shouted nooooooooooooo!!!!! Why! He stopped and thought why he made such \\\\\\ a big mistake and he said to himself what if it turns out to be the opposite of an

How will this affect the Monster? What impact will it have on his life? What choices will he make as a result? The monster was treated with compassion and kindness. This will make him feel better. The monster will act nice to any person who treats him well. This will have a good impact on the monsters life by making a lot of friends and making everyone like him and everyone will love him (no one will hit him.) He will not harm anyone, he will like everyone and he will treat everyone with compassion and kindness.

Name: Ansh Date: 11/3/13 angel. What if it turns out to be very powerful? What if it kills everyone on earth? He keeps on thinking, until suddenly a thing that looked like a monster wakes up and came up slowly from the bed. Then Frankenstein turned around and looked but the monster had hid underneath the bookshelf where no one could find him because he was very afraid. (Frankenstein didnt see anything because the monster went to sleep.) He tries to find the hiding creature that he had created. He finds him shivering under the book shelf. He tries to encourage him to come out even though he has not seen his face. At first the creature refused to come out but then eventually he did and Frankensteins first was that of horror. Frankenstein felt bad because he created a thing which will harm all mankind but he was trying to make a good angel which would help the people of earth. Then he realized that the monster was innocent because he did not do anything to Frankenstein. Frankenstein was nice to the monster because he knew that he was feeling weird and confuse, not knowing what is going on. He decided to show him compassion and kindness. Rewrite the scene using your ideas from the purple boxes above. Your scene should: Include A Note On Staging refer to page 6 in the Frankenstein play o Explain the set design It will look a bit scary and creepy because everything is messy and everything is thrown on the floor. The shelves are cluttered bottles and specimens. The Monster is laying down on a dirty table with a dirty sheet draped over him. A torn dirty couch was on the opposite side of the table. The wires were just lying on the carpet and somewhere connecting the monster to a huge black machine. o Explain the costumes and props COSTUMES: Frankenstein: was wearing a long lab coat which was bloodied and stained. The Monster: was wearing old clothes like a suit. Clerval: was wearing a black suit and carrying an umbrella. PROPS: black machines, a lamp, a chair, a bag, wires, carpet, bottles of chemicals and potion flasks, Clervals umbrella. o Explain lighting, sound, and special effects Lighting: was dim green light and gloomy, not a lot of lighting, it was hard to see. Sound: sound of lightening in the background and heavy rain. Special effects: lightning strikes the table were the monster is and smoke comes out when the monster is zapped to life.

Comment [JH1]: This should be is wearing, since the play is current, was would mean it is in the past.

Name: Ansh Date: 11/3/13 Include a paragraph to explain your choices for your Note On Staging I wanted it to look basically the same as the original play because it is the same theme but a little different. I am changing the content of the scene and therefore I do not need to change the setting. Include descriptions of the characters refer to page 8 in the Frankenstein play o List each character and give a short (2-3 sentences) description of his/her appearance and personality Frankenstein: Young scientist who believed believesin non-violence he was also compassions to the people who look a bit strange like the Monster. The Monster: He looks ugly but he has a good heart (He is a good Monster). Clerval: Same age as Frankenstein he is impressed Include stage directions (in italics) to indicate how the characters move and how they speak In your scene, include dialogue that will move the plot along and show how the new situation unfolds and how it impacts the Monsters life

Criterion A: You compose a script that shows how a situation impacts the Monsters life using a lot of details (dialogue and stage directions).

Criterion B: You write in the form of a script, using the appropriate structures expected in a play script. Your scene builds appropriately.

Criterion C: Your write your characters to reflect their personalities and tone. Your script is free of grammar, punctuation, and spelling errors.

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You do not reach the standard described below. Your script reflects very limited imagination Your script does not use the Your script does not reflect the voice of and creativity. It does not show the organizational structures of a script. the characters. situation and how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script is generally disorganized. Your script has very frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and spelling. Your script has no details (dialogue, stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Your script reflects limited imagination and Your script sometimes uses the Your script sometimes reflects the creativity. It attempts to show the situation organizational structures of a script. voice of the characters. and how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script is beginning to be organized Your script has frequent errors in Your script has insufficient details but lacks coherence. grammar, punctuation, and spelling. (dialogue, stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Your script reflects some imagination and Your script usually uses the Your script often reflects the voice of creativity. It somewhat shows the situation organizational structures of a script. the characters. and how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script is generally well-organized. Your script uses generally accurate Your script has adequate details (dialogue, grammar, punctuation, and spelling. stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Your script reflects imagination and Your script consistently uses the Your script often reflects the voice of creativity. It shows the situation and how it organizational structures of a script. the characters. impacted the Monsters life. Your script is usually well-organized. Your script consistently uses a formal Your script has substantial details The ideas build on each other. tone to explain. Your grammar, (dialogue, stage directions) to show how the punctuation, and spelling are accurate. Monster develops through the scene.

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Name: Ansh
Your script reflects a lot of imagination and creativity. It clearly shows the situation and how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script has illustrative details (dialogue, stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Include a title Describe each character Include a note on staging to explain how your staging choices (set design, costumes/props, effects) show the situation and its impact on the Monster Employ dialogue to show how the scene develops Include stage directions to show the action Use details to show the actions and emotions of the characters involved

Date: 11/3/13
Your script uses the organizational structures of a script in a sophisticated manner. Your script is consistently wellorganized. The ideas build on each other in a sophisticated manner. Use the format of a script o Skip a line each time a new character speaks o Italicize the stage directions o Write dialogue by bolding character names Build the dialogue and action to first show what the situation is, then how the Monster is affected Your script masterfully reflects the voice of the characters. Your script shows a mastery of formal tone to explain. Your grammar, punctuation, and spelling are completely accurate. Edit for spelling, punctuation, and grammar Use first person when writing the dialogue Use the type of language that the character would use when writing the dialogue

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Title: Frankenstein Notes on staging: It will look a bit scary and creepy because everything is

messy and everything is thrown on the floor except for the potions. The shelves are cluttered with bottles and specimens. The Monster is laying down on a dirty table with a dirty sheet draped over him. A torn dirty couch was on the opposite side of the table. The wires are just lying on the carpet and somewhere connecting the monster to a huge black machine.

Characters: Frankenstein: was wearing a long lab coat which was bloodied and stained. The Monster: was wearing old clothes like a suit. Clerval: was wearing a black suit and carrying an umbrella. Narrator: Frankenstein is creating an angel but forgot to add the most important chemical to make the angel. He realizes he used the chemical which destroys angels. Then he remembered that Clerval, his friend had this special chemical which could make the angel. Frankenstein: (shouts)Nooooooooooooo!!!!! Why! What if my creation turns out to be the opposite of an angel? What if it turns out to be very powerful? What if it kills everyone on earth?

Comment [JH2]: Clerval is a man!

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Name: Ansh

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Narrator: Frankenstein looks puzzled, as a creature that looks like a monster wakes up and come up slowly from the bed. Frankenstein turns around and looks but the monster hides underneath the bookshelf. Frankenstein does not see anything because the monster is hiding, but he hears a noise. Frankenstein: Hello? Who is there? Narrator: Slowly walking around, Frankenstein discovers the creature hiding and shivering under the book shelf. Frankenstein: him to come out even though he has not seen his face by saying Come on out I wont hurt you or harm you. Narrator: At first the creature refused to come out but then eventually he did and Frankensteins first reaction is of horror. Frankenstein felt bad because he created a thing which will harm all mankind but he is trying to make a good angel which would help the people of earth. Then he realized that the monster is innocent because he did not do anything to Frankenstein. Narrator: Frankenstein is nice to the monster because he knewknows that he is feeling weird and confused, not knowing what is going on. He decided to show him compassion and Kindnesskindness. Narrator: after 5hours the monster wakes up and during that time he hears Frankenstein talking and gets very afraid. Frankenstein: How are you feeling? Narrator: He The monster takes of the dirty sheets and the two wires which are attached to him.
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Monster: Who you are? Where I am? Who me? Its in freezing hear, Who that is? Narrator: as clerval Clerval comes in the room she gets a disgusted feeling about Frankensteins stinky dirty room, her foot is very wet because of the room, and he starts talking but suddenly stops looking at the monster. ShHe took a potion which had a lot of chemicals. Frankenstein: No wait Narraitor: He is too late as clervel Clervel throughs the potion (with a lot of chemicals) on the monsters. Monster: Ahhhhhhhhhhhh my eyes burns, ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh me nose. Narrator: The chemical damaged his face and he started scratching his face ( eyes and nose.) Frankenstein: Oh no, Clerval what did you do!!!!!!!!! Clerval: what did I do, I just saved your life from that horrible disgusting creature, you should be thanking me. Frankenstein: (in an angry voice.)Clerval why did you do this, this is my creation and we are about to know each other, next time nock at the door before entering (in an angry voice.) Monster: Why you do that I take revenge. Narrator: Frankenstein runs across the room trying to stop the monster.

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Frankenstein: No wait please forgive him he doesnt know that you wont hurt him. Narrator: Shouting across the room, the monster didnt listen because he was to fast and because his nose and eyes are still paining. Then he punched Clerval so hard that he fainted. Frankenstein: Clerval, are you ok? Monster: Why you do this to I Frankenstein? Frankenstein: No, I didnt do this I just tried to be friends but clerval Clerval my friend just came and attack you for no reason. I didnt do anything. Monster: Why she hit me? Frankenstein: maybe Maybe she thought that you are a bad evil guy and her his first reaction is for protection. Narrator: clerval Clerval wakes up as the. mMonster: (talking to himself) is thinking that wWhy did I hit this person without even thinking, I should have understood why people do this, Looking at the mirror. Clerval: Who is this weird looking thing? Frankenstein: calm Calm down hes just my creation he wont harm you. Monster: are Are ok?

Name: Ansh

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Clerval: Yeah, Im sorry that I threw that potion on your face please forgive me, I thought you are very bad and you are trying to attack my friend Frankenstein. Monster: oh Oh ok as it just reaction, well its me fault me the one who reacted without thinking, Im sorry. Clerval: Oh, Its ok. Frankenstein: Clerval hope you alright. Clerval: Im fine. Frankenstein: quick Quick lets show the world about the monster. By: Ansh Moral: Never judge a book by its cover
Comment [JH10]: How does this show what the impacts are of the situation on the monster?