What does it look like? What does it say?

Observing and Summarizing Text 2 Paragraphs on The Act of Writing

Haneen, good effort on your first full writing assignment. You have the start for two paragraphs.
However, you havent demonstrated that you clearly understand the difference between
describing a text (what text looks like) and summarizing at text ( what text says). You also need
to work on developing clearly structured paragraphs with direction (using a topic sentence) and
support. Most importantly, you MUST learn to understand what plagiarism is and how to avoid it.
Please see me during office hours as soon as possible.

0 for plagiarism
Global concerns
1. Content
The two paragraphs fit the assignment. Youve made a start but
NQTY!
Observations of text: the paragraph provides a clear
description of what the text looks like. NEEDS WORK - What
concrete observations on what the text looks like can you make? In
observation stick to what the text looks like rather than what it. The
closer you observe your text, the easier it will be to quickly understand
the main ideas.
Summary of text The paragraph captures the main points of
the text. GOOD START You have done a good job of capturing most
of the main ideas in the text. You also present them in a clear and
logical way. However, you need to work on putting these ideas in your own

words or, when using the authors words, putting them in quotation marks and
clearly noting the page on which you found the text.

PLAGIARISM is not acceptable. Please review the Course Outline

and Course Expectations and Policies handouts to be sure you
understand what plagiarism is. If you choose to use someone elses
words, you must put them in quotation marks and cite the author and
source.

2. Organization
The paragraph begins with a strong topic sentence that
includes both a topic and controlling idea, providing clear
direction for the paragraph. NO Neither paragraph has a clear
topic sentence.
The paragraph contains several specific supporting sentences.
A START In the second, summary paragraph you have a set of
supporting ideas.
The paragraph ends with an appropriate concluding sentence.
NO
Local concerns
3. Format Nice job on formatting!
The paragraphs are typed. YES
Writing I (ENGL 233)
Sharry Lapp

What does it look like? What does it say?

The authors name and the date are in the upper right hand
corner of the page. YES Avoid bolding the date.
There is a title. YES
The title is centered. YES
There are one inch margins on both sides of the page. YES
The paragraphs are double-spaced. NO Please double space
using the Line and Paragraph Spacing tool; select 2.0.
An appropriate font is used. YES

4. Contains careful, concise language

Word choice is correct and clear. Word choice is generally clear.
Language is precise, concrete and concise; redundancy and
fluff are avoided. Watch out for awkward and wordy phrasing. Think
concise and precise!
5. Shows a clear grasp of English grammar, spelling, and
punctuation
There is a period, question mark or exclamation mark after
every sentence. NEEDS WORK Space after not before commas and
periods.
Capital letters are used correctly. NO Be sure to capitalize every
word in a title (except articles and prepositions).
Spelling is correct. YES generally
Grammar and sentence structure are correct. NEEDS WORK
Watch out for overuse or unclear use of it. Work on subject-verb
agreement (S-V) and avoiding run-on sentences (RO).
a lot of misconceptions
a misconception
If you type up your assignments, you can then use the Spelling and
Grammar Check tool to help you find and correct mistakes. While it will not
always find mistakes, it can help you locate most of them.

Writing I (ENGL 233)

Sharry Lapp