Student Feedback

Reported on 18/01/2016 12:08:13

Student Name:
Student ID:
Subject:
Assessment Task:
Code:

David Snowman
A001324136
Project
MBA Project Proposal
729PROJ

Comments

Introduction

Background information provided

Research problem clearly articulated / defined

Focus for the study

Research purpose stated

Appropriate research questions identified

Significance of project identified

Project is feasible

You have presented information about the organisation in an

acceptable manner. The research problem was presented. The
organisation was described. The key issues were articulated in a
reasonable manner. However the focus of your research is quite
broad. Indeed absence of a dedicated human resources function
is quite a valid issue. You have highlighted a couple of issues
that is employee development, employee engagement and
employee retention. Although all these HR issues are linked to
each other, you need to narrow the focus of your study to one of
these issues. Keeping all these issues in your study will make the
project of this level and scope quite complex. Form the
introduction one can conclude that the core issue of this study is
employee retention. You can also rephrase your title for example;
How the Human Resource Management practices of ABC
Communications influence the employee retention, a critical
review.
The research purpose has been reasonably stated. The
research purpose and the research questions are linked with the
problem statement. However as mentioned in the above
comment you need to narrow the focus of your study. To achieve
that you will have to rephrase your area of investigation. Most of
your research questions are linked to employee retention so you
will not require changing much there. However, the first research
question is too broad and it can be removed. It will be a better
option for you to focus on retention as per introduction of the
proposal therefore you can remove the word performance from
the second question. The rest of research questions are fine and
link to employee retention. You will need to narrow the focus of
the significance of the project as well. This is a feasible project
but you will need to narrow the focus to the core issue of this
study that is employee retention.

Project related literature summary

Connection to an aspect of MBA studies

Alignment with MBA specialisation (not required for MBA

generic)

Literature cited

Literature aligned with project title and with problem

statement
Research methodology

The literature is linked to human resource management. This

literature will require considerable expansion when you write you
project draft. You will require linking the literature to the core
issue of your study.

Research methodology has been adequately explained.

However, as you are using one organisation your research is a

Research method explained and justified

Data collection methods explained and justified

Collection of primary data included

Questions to be asked from participants stated

Research approvals obtained

case study so you will require discussing case study

methodology in more detail with references. You have
adequately explained qualitative data collection. More details of
proposed data analysis methodologies should have been
explained. Methodology section will also require considerable
expansion with more references at the draft stage. You your
interview questions are same as the research questions.
Research questions inform the reader what the study intends to
investigate. The research questions become part of the
concluding sections of a project, when a researcher reports to
what extent his study has answered these questions. Interview
questions are derived from the research questions. You should
rephrase the interview questions as in interviews the researcher
asks about peoples opinions who are the respondents of the
study. You need to use phrases like What in your opinion are
the causes of low employee retention at ABC? and What
practices do you recommend to be introduced etc. Research
approvals for this research have been obtained.

Ethical considerations

Ethics issues identified

Use of consent forms explained

All the ethical considerations have been taken into account.

Research Ethics Sheet completed

Schedule for completion

Research schedule or Gantt chart included

The research schedule is appropriate for the proposed project.

Schedule is feasible
Style Guide

Margins, line spacing and fonts

Dates and numbers

Harvard referencing

Sourcing and quotations

Labelling of figures, diagrams, tables

The report structure has been demonstrated. The content has

been structured and organised logically. However referencing
has not been done properly throughout the proposal. Some
minor errors were observed in the referencing style.

List of references
English

Spelling

No major issues with English language and style in the report.

Grammar
Structure and flow

Title is on the first page

Table of Contents

Logical structure

Connections between sections

Easy to read

Outcome:
Reasearch Ethics Assessment Outcome:

AIB style and structure guidelines have been followed and the
sections are logically connected.

Approved
Approved

Overall Comment
This is a feasible project. However the student needs to do incorporate the recommended changes in the project draft once he
narrows the focus of his study. Adequate referencing should be used in all the sections. Please ensure that you incorporate the
above comments in your project draft. Further make sure to use interviews quotes when you discuss your qualitative findings in
the project draft.