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Jim awoke, in the trashed smelly mysterious alleyways still in deep pain after his
cruel pounding at the workhouse. Jim was Itchy, smelly, out of food and homeless .
Down the road, back in the workhouse the grumpy carpet beaters and all the kids
had realized Jim had made his escape. Slowly beginning to move Jim's mind was
racing with wonder. Jim had lots of wonderment of if he would be caught and
what would happen if he was.
After walking for a while Jim began to start building up his pace to a running
eed , Jim found a dark foggy, gloomy alleyway with a ripped raggy couch an old
s of wood and steel. Laying down on the old rugged couch his eyelids became
vy and Jim started to dose. Suddenly he heard loud CLIT CLATS of horses hooves
he street Jim sprung up off the couch and hid behind it. Glancing around the
r of the couch, a massive brown horse and cart trotted past.
e next morning Jim was wide awake and excited he was hoping to find his
Hiding the shadows of the houses to hide his workhouse clothes he was
g he was an agent on a mission to find his sisters before he gets
gan to hide behind the London hills Jim found a place to sleep and
a deep sleep.
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Narrative
Criteria
Level 2
Level 3
Level 4
Sentence
Types
Mainly simple
sentences with some
compound sentences.
Sentence
starters
A range of different
starters in including
adverbial phrases to give
reader variety and detail.
Punctuation
, Grammar
(Editing)
Organisatio
n
Paragraphs used to
separate character
description, time and
places etc
Vocabulary
A range of ambitious
words used to add
interest. Some use of
figurative language eg
simile and metaphor.
Detail /
Elaboration
Structure &
purpose.
Clear structure An
opening with a deliberate
hook. Some build up to a
climax and resolution.
Language
features
Some inconsistent
tense and person eg
present and past
tense.