Report Essay Rough Draft

by Beck Lauren

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Report Essay Rough Draft
GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

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/100

QM Spacing
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Comment 1
this looks like your thesis statement...consider moving this to the end of your introductory
paragraph...that is where your thesis needs to be

Comment 2
this quote is too long...only use what your need

Comment 3
period belongs af ter the citation

QM Spacing
Spacing

Comment 4
where did this inf ormation come f rom?

QM Unnecessary Comma
Unnecessary Comma

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 QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

Comment 5
although topic sentence must be all you and not include inf ormation that needs to be cited, this
sentence includes inf ormation that needs to be cited

QM Unnecessary Comma
Unnecessary Comma

QM No Personal words- No I, you, we, us, "one", etc

QM Spacing
Spacing

Comment 6
topic sentences should not contain inf ormation that needs to be cited

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QM Rhetorical Questions
Don't use Rhetorical Questions in academic essays

QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."

QM Trash Word
So, Really, Very, etc. are unnecessary. T hey are trash words.

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QM Contractions
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QM Contractions
No Contractions

QM Rhetorical Questions
Don't use Rhetorical Questions in academic essays

Comment 7
period belongs af ter citation

Comment 8
back to back quotes...need analysis or connection in between

QM Wordy
Wordy:
If you use too many words to describe a relatively minor point, your paper may seem wordy. In
order to be as concise as possible, trim your sentences down and use longer, more meaningf ul
words. T ry to use f ewer two- and three-letter words, passive constructions, and weak verbs
such as "seem" and "appear."

QM Contractions
No Contractions

QM C/S
Comma splice:
A sentence must have both a subject and a main verb in order to be complete, but it cannot
have more than one subject or main verb. A comma splice is a variety of run-on sentence that
occurs when two complete sentences, each with its own subject and verb, are joined mistakenly
by a comma. T here are generally three methods of correcting this problem: 1) Replace the
comma with a stronger mark of punctuation such as a period or semicolon, 2) use a
coordinating conjunction ("and," "but," "or," "nor") to join the two constructions, or 3) make one
of the two sentences a dependent construction by linking it to the other with a subordinating
conjunction ("if ," "when," "so that," "although," "because") or relative pronoun ("that," "which,"
"who," "whom," "whose").

QM No Personal words- No I, you, we, us, "one", etc

QM Contractions
No Contractions

Comment 9
I don't understand
 I don't understand

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Comment 10
are all of these in your essay?

QM Citation f ormat

QM Citation f ormat

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