Cultural Identity Essay

by Jake Webb

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Cultural Identity Essay
GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

85
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/100

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Comment 1
You have some strong ideas in your essay. Some of your paragraphs transition abruptly. Let's
work on moving f rom one idea to another so that they build toward the larger idea you conclude
with.
RUBRIC: CULTURAL IDENTITY RUBRIC

IDEAS 1 Prof icient

EXEMPLARY T he essay has a clear and strongly maintained central idea (e.g., internal/external
conf lict or central metaphor/concept) to f ocus the essay.

PROFICIENT T he essay has an adequately maintained central idea to f ocus the topic.

EMERGING T he essay has an unclear or insuf f iciently maintained central idea and lacks f ocus.

INCOMPLETE T he essay is not coherent and does not clearly maintain a central f ocus.

IDEAS 2 Prof icient

EXEMPLARY T he essay uses a range of well-chosen, relevant, and suf f icient evidence to create a
vivid sense of personal cultural identity.

PROFICIENT T he essay uses a suf f icient range of evidence to develop the explanation of cultural
identity.

EMERGING T he essay uses vague, irrelevant, or insuf f icient evidence to develop the explanation
of cultural identity.

INCOMPLETE T he essay provides little or no evidence to support or develop an explanation of

cultural identity.

ST RUCT URE 1 Prof icient

EXEMPLARY T he writer uses an ef f ective organizational strategy that creates clarity and
cohesion.

PROFICIENT T he writer uses an adequate organizational strategy that creates a sense of

completeness.

EMERGING T he writer uses an inconsistent or conf using organization.

INCOMPLETE T he writer does not organize ideas clearly.

ST RUCT URE 2 Prof icient

EXEMPLARY T he writer introduces ideas smoothly, links them logically, and provides a satisf ying
conclusion.

PROFICIENT T he writer introduces ideas, links them adequately, and provides a conclusion.

EMERGING T he writer does not introduce, link, and/or conclude ideas.

INCOMPLETE T he writer does not link ideas.

ST RUCT URE 3 Prof icient

EXEMPLARY T he writer uses appropriate and varied transitions.

PROFICIENT T he writer uses some varied transitions.

EMERGING T he writer uses weak, repetitive, or insuf f icient transitions.

INCOMPLETE T he writer uses weak or no transitions.

LANGUAGE 1 Prof icient

EXEMPLARY T he writer uses precise language and appropriate vocabulary to create a distinctive
tone or voice.

PROFICIENT T he writer uses appropriate vocabulary and generally maintains an appropriate

tone/voice.

EMERGING T he writer uses simple or inappropriate vocabulary that does not maintain consistent
tone/voice.

INCOMPLETE T he writer uses vague, imprecise vocabulary and does not maintain consistent or
appropriate tone/voice.

LANGUAGE 2 Prof icient

EXEMPLARY T he writer uses parallel structure and various types of phrases to convey meaning or
add variety and interest.

PROFICIENT T he writer uses parallel structure and various types of phrases correctly.

EMERGING T he writer does not use parallel structure and/or varied types of phrases correctly.

INCOMPLETE T he writer uses no parallel structure or phrases, or uses them incorrectly.

LANGUAGE 3 Prof icient

EXEMPLARY T he writer demonstrates strong command of conventions of grammar, usage,

capitalization, punctuation, and spelling.

PROFICIENT T he writer demonstrates adequate command of conventions; some minor errors in

grammar, usage, capitalization, or spelling do not interf ere with meaning.

EMERGING T he writer demonstrates partial or insuf f icient command of conventions; errors in

grammar, usage, capitalization, punctuation, and/or spelling interf ere with meaning.

INCOMPLETE T he writer demonstrates little command of conventions; numerous errors in grammar,

usage, capitalization, punctuation, and/or spelling interf ere with meaning.