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The difference between a decent narrative and a compelling narrative is how it is written
and how well it captures the attention of its intended audience. A personal narrative can tell the
authors personal experiences and also show us the message the author got from their
experiences. The ways they achieved this is by not using explicit detailing, being able to connect
with their readers in a more intimate way and being able to answer the So what? in their
writing.
Any author that finds his writing to be valuable will make the difference between an
average narrative and a well rounded one. Narratives commonly share an insight on an author's
experiences and how they felt about it. In Writing the Memoir by Judith Barrington, it briefly
explains why authors write their personal stories and why they matter. The book also gives us an
idea of why readers connect with the reading, part of why you care, of course, is because you
can tell how much she cares. Readers cant tell exactly how long an author took to write a
narrative but they can tell how much an author gave up of themselves to write it. The narrative
that connects to the reader in a deeper sense is where it starts making a difference.
The more skillfully written an essay is, the bigger an impact it has on its readers.
When an author lacks word choice, the meaning behind an essay is lost on most occasions. The
goal for most authors is to make their readers feel like they are in the story. They want their
readers to imagine everything that is going on in the story. The only way to do this without
physically showing the readers something is by being as descriptive as possible. This is where
the 5 senses come into play. By focusing on some of these senses and not all of them, it creates a
unique imagine in the reader's mind. Although in the story by Michihiko Hachiya named after
the famous bombing of Hiroshima, Hiroshima Diary. In the reading, the main character goes
through the experience of dealing with the few seconds before the blast of the bomb takes effect.
Garden shadows disappeared. The view where a moment before all had been so bright
and sunny was now dark and hazy. Though swirling dust, I could barely discern a
wooden column that had supported one corner of my house. It was leaning crazily and the
In this short description of his surroundings, he focuses only on the sense of sight. While adding
this in the beginning of his story, he sets a visual understanding of his situation for the readers to
imagine. As he writes ... a moment before all had been so bright and sunny was now dark and
hazy. he was describing the difference between what he was seeing to how his environment was
before the blast of the bomb. He skillfully uses only sight to express his emotion of chaos and
disbelief without making the audience feel overwhelmed with graphic images of the destructive
atomic bomb.
In the same time, a story should have the ability to impact their reader and leave them
thinking critically. As the strength of the narrative grows so does the effectiveness of the writing
and the depth of its impact on the reader. The author should be able to make the readers think of
the So what component of reading their story. The importance of a narrative should make you
feel a certain way after reading (e.g. joyful, full of sorrow, indifferent,etc.). It all depends on the
given you a part of themselves. An example of this can be found in Langston Hughes
Salvation where he describes a time in his life where he questions the religious beliefs that are
imposed on him by his aunt and all the older people in his church. Unfortunately, he does not
find the religious salvation that he expected to get. He expresses how the disappointment
I cried. I cried in bed alone, and couldn't talk. I buried my head under the quilts, but my
aunt heard me. She woke up and told my uncle I was crying because the Holy Ghost had
come into my life, and because I had seen Jesus. But I was really crying because I
couldn't bear to tell her that I had lied, that I had deceived everybody in the church, that I
hadn't seen Jesus, and that now I didn't believe there was a Jesus anymore, since he didn't
Here, the author gives a little of himself to the reader, as he reopens his wounds. He wants his
readers to understand the sadness and grief he felt with the loss of his religion beliefs. By
showing his true feelings he opens up a critical perspective on religion on his community,
something that is not commonly done. The impact of his words are noticeable because he goes
above and beyond the expectations of describing his outter feelings as well as his inner thoughts.
Allowing a deeper understand of what the author is tempting to express and in this case he is
On the other hand, if an author wants to be successful in their story they must clearly
develop their message throughout the story, while in the same time still keeping the reader
engaged. A story that can get out all the details without over shadowing the meaning, shows
which narrative is compelling. Going back to Hiroshimas Diary, there is a point in the story
where the author is still processing his surroundings and then comes to the realization of what
I paused to rest. Gradually things around me came into focus. There were the shadowy
form of people, some of whom looked like walking ghosts. Others moved as though in
pain, like scarecrows, their arms held out from their bodies with forearms and hands
dangling. These people puzzled me until I suddenly realized that they had been burned
and were holding their arms out to prevent the painful friction of raw surfaces rubbing
together.
At first he is clueless and then reality hits him, they are not scarecrows: they are burned victims
holding their arms up to prevent more pain. The author uses the word raw to express their open
wounds and the raw emotions he is feeling about his surroundings. The readers are given a
graphic image without expressing all the gruesome details. The author purposely wrote this event
into his story to add more character growth and show the readers an inside view of how his
thought process is developing. He goes through different phrases as this event progresses and
changes his perspective as time goes by. At first he is a victim affected by the bombing, clueless
of his surroundings. Then he begins questioning his surroundings, this shows he is growing and
becoming more aware. Finally he begins to add reasoning to the things he questioned earlier.
This shows character growth and how he has finally came to his senses. The author wants his
inner thoughts to have an impact on how his readers perceive the events in the same way he
grammar used in the text does not make a difference if it tells a more engaging story than
something written in proper English. It all depends on how the author wants to write his narrative
and get his message across. In Little Journey by Hiroki Iida, he uses English to the best of his
abilities to get his message across, even if it is not the best quality of Englisht:
On the very day of little journey, I got souvenirs for grandma and traffic mony, seeing off
by my mother in front of house, I went to the station. That was so big, like a castle. But
there was a problem. It was that I didn't know how to buy a ticket. For the time being, I
lined up. I was waiting for my turn with my heart beating. At last my turn came.
However, I didn't know what to buy, so i was standing. And then, ticket machine spoke to
me.
He uses English as best as he can to get the message across of a time in his life when he realized
it was time for him to grow up and help his mother by going to deliver a package to his
grandmother in his mother's place. Although his writing does not align with how a proper essay
should be written, a narrative does not have to. In fact an essay is a place to get create and create
your own format. For Iida being creative means using the English he speaks normally and
infusing it with his writing to make it more personal and unique. Being creative in general means
allowing the story to flow as long as it needs to until the flow reaches the point it wants to make.
When an author writes a narrative, it does not have to be proper. A proper essay needs 5+
paragraphs while a narrative can be one big paragraph and it would not affect the impact of the
story. A narrative can be written however the author deems necessary for their narrative to be
successful, even if that means it won't follow the conventional rules for writing in English.
A Personal Narrative can be written in any format and tell an amazing story but there are
still some factors that a narrative must include for it to be a successful writing. When a story has
no value or impact on the reader, a reader finds no interest in reading. Although an author can
put together a masterpiece , if it doesn't connect to a reader it has the same effect of having no
value. When an author successfully puts all these factors together the type of format used for a
Work cited
1. Barrington Judith. Writing the Memoir Second Edition. The Eighth Mountain Press
4. Michihiko, Hachiya. Hiroshima Diary. Excerpted in The Writer's Presence. Eds. Donald
McQuade, and Robert Atwan. 4th edition. New York: Bedford, 2003. 249-53.