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Joseph Mcfarlane raising in the sun

Mr. Farrell

March 12, 2015

English Language Arts 9 $MONEY$

The importance of money has become so important for live, that you could not survive without it. You could not

even buy something to eat. You would end up being a poor homeless person. Even if you try harmonizing with the nature

to survive, it would be almost impossible nowadays, expect you would be living in a tribe. Tribes have learned to live

naturally and have adapted to the nature, while industry countries have invented artificial stuff for everything. Money is

one of the most important things in our lives. Even if we haven’t noticed yet, living without it would be literally

inconceivable. My claim is that money is life because people die over wanted more

money than they already have. In the story raising in the sun walter stated that “Nothing happen in this world

‘less you pay somebody off!’

Money is life because without it we cannot survive we would die or be homeless. In the passage walter

referring to the job he got says “Nothing happen in this world less you pay somebody off!’ to me i think money

is important to A individual. Also if that individual does not have the money he does not survive or worse he

might die.

Another reason why my claim is true is because people all over the world uses money, Anywhere you go

you would have to pay to travel to anywhere also to own/have a house you need to pay bills, waterbills, and

electricbills. In the passage walter says “A job mama, a job? i open and close car doors all day long. I drive a

man around in his limousine and i say, “yes, sir?” Mama, That ain’t nothing at all. Mama, I don’t know if i can

make you understand.

Some people might not agree like my opponent would say,Money is not life because in the passage

Mama stated that”once upon a time freedom used to be life now its money” Mama also said that you ain’t

satisfied or proud of nothing we done. This claim is not worthy to be followed because even if you had the

freedom you still needed a job to support yourself to live longer and also when you have children you need to

also have money to support them.

In conclusion Money is life because without money we can’t do anything in this world thats fun without
paying for it. I remember when i wanted a ps4 but i could not get it because it cost money anything you want it

cost money in this world. In the future i think we will have to pay for everything in some different type of way

Introduction
Hook: Importance of Money
Introduce the author and the play
CLAIM: Is money life? If not money, then what?

Supporting Paragraph 1
Topic Sentence about claim
At least one piece of Textual Evidence
Commentary
Concluding Sentence

Supporting Paragraph 2
Topic Sentence about claim
At least one piece of Textual Evidence
Commentary
Concluding Sentence

Counterclaim and Rebuttal Paragraph


Topic Sentence about counterclaim
Textual Evidence of counterclaim
Rebuttal (why the counterclaim is less valid than your claim)
Concluding Sentence

Conclusion
Restate claim: Is money life?
Personal experience
Concluding thought

TEXTUAL EVIDENCE REQUIREMENTS:


Minimum 2 quotations from A Raisin in the Sun
Minimum of 1 quotation or fact from an outside source
Maximum of 1 personal experience or story

HELP with CLAIMS, COUNTERCLAIMS, and REBUTTALS: http://goo.gl/nV5XEJ


NOTE: Once you have completed the graphic organizer, we are going to transfer your work to the drafting
space and reformat it (Ctrl+C and Ctrl+Shift+V). I will help you with that in class.

Type your responses HERE:

Hook: Importance of
1 Money
Help with hooks:
http://goo.gl/5lz0qR

Introduce the author


and the play.

CLAIM: Is money
life? If not money,
then what?
Help with claims:
http://goo.gl/nV5XEJ

In one topic
2 sentence, explain
one reason why your
claim is true.

Provide at least one


high-quality piece of
textual evidence for
your claim.

Add at least one


sentence of
commentary to:
1) explain,
2) clarify,
or
3) offer an opinion
about your textual
evidence.

Add a concluding
sentence.

In one topic
3 sentence, explain
another reason why
your claim is true.

Provide at least one


high-quality piece of
textual evidence for
your claim.

Add at least one


sentence of
commentary to:
1) explain,
2) clarify,
or
3) offer an opinion
about your textual
evidence.

Add a concluding
sentence.

In one topic
4 sentence, explain
how others may
disagree with you
(this is your
counterclaim).

Provide at least one


high-quality piece of
textual evidence for
your counterclaim.
Help with counterclaims:
http://goo.gl/nV5XEJ

Add at least one


sentence of
commentary to:
1) explain,
2) clarify,
or
3) offer an opinion
about your textual
evidence.

Offer a rebuttal,
explaining why your
original claim is
more valid than this
counterclaim. Try to
use textual evidence.
Help with rebuttals:
http://goo.gl/nV5XEJ

Add a concluding
sentence.
Restate your original
5 claim to answer the
question: Is money
life? If not money,
then what?
Help with conclusions:
http://goo.gl/5qJ3Xh

Offer a piece of
personal feedback as
to why you believe
your claim is true.

Add a concluding
thought for your
reader to consider. A
concluding thought
might teach the
reader something
new, leave them
thinking about
something, or answer
the question, “so
what?”
Help with conclusions:
http://goo.gl/5qJ3Xh
Claims Essay Rubric

Standard Addressed 4 3 2 1 0
I can introduce With help, I can Even with help, I
I can introduce
precise claim(s), introduce precise cannot introduce
precise claim(s),
distinguish the claim(s), precise claim(s),
distinguish the I can introduce a
claim(s) from distinguish the distinguish the
PROBLEM claim from precise claim that
alternate or claim from claim from
FORMULATION: alternate or remains
opposing claims, alternate or alternate or
Formulates opposing claims, consistent
testable/researchable and and create an opposing claims, opposing claims,
and create an throughout the
relevant questions, problem organization that and create an or create an
statements, or hypotheses organizational text, and which is
establishes clear organizational organizational
that demonstrate clarity structure that evaluated against
relationships structure that structure that
about the nature of the task. maintains at least one
among claim(s), maintains maintains
consistency with counterclaim.
counterclaims, consistency with consistency with
the overall
reasons, and the overall the overall
argument.
evidence. argument. argument.
RESEARCH: I can draw
Collects information and data With help, I can Even with help, I
necessary to solve the evidence from a I can draw I can draw
draw evidence cannot draw
problem as formulated, range of texts to evidence from a evidence from at
from a range of evidence from a
drawing evidence from support my claim range of texts to least two texts to
informational texts, texts to support range of texts to
and refute a support my claim. support my claim.
conducting an investigation, my claim. support my claim.
or generating data. counterclaim.
I can develop
INTERPRETATION: claim(s) and
The student identifies and I can develop my
counterclaims
considers the most relevant own and other I can develop my With help, I can
fairly, supplying
information or findings and claims, own claims using develop my own
develops insights. To make evidence for
examining the evidence; claim(s) with
connections and draw each while Even with help, I
conclusions, the student evidence and counterclaims some evidence,
pointing cannot develop
uses structures and implications for may only but may ignore or
out the strengths evidence of a
strategies, which contribute each. Some be mentioned. dismiss
to the framework for and limitations balanced look at
recognition of The two sets of counterclaims,
communicating a solution. of both in a the issue.
The student reflects on the audience’s claims may not and cannot
manner that
quality of the conclusions knowledge is be fair or recognize the
anticipates the
drawn and may revisit and present or balanced. audience.
revise previous steps in the audience’s
implied.
process. knowledge level
and concerns.
I can utilize peer I can share my With help, I can
I can utilize peer Even with help, I
COMMUNICATION: feedback to work with peers utilize peer
feedback to cannot utilize
Incorporates feedback to improve my work and request feedback to
make appropriate revisions. improve my work peer feedback to
for precision and feedback for improve my work
for precision. improve my work.
style. precision or style. for precision.
I can write and Even with help,
PRECISION: With help, I can
revise a timely I can write and I can write and I cannot write
Assures that the final product write and revise a
meets all discipline-specific claims essay, revise a claims revise a claims and revise a
claims essay,
standards for language, attending to or essay, attending essay, attending claims essay,
terms, expressions, rules, attending to all
exceeding all to all aspects of to some aspects attending to all
terminology, and aspects of the
aspects of the the task. of the task. aspects of the
conventions. task.
task. task.

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