Thread 1: Introduction

FROM: Rustam - (05/24/18)

SUBJECT: Who is Who
FROM: Shabana Khattak (05/24/18)
SUBJECT: RE: Who is Who Dear Sir,
Shabana Khattak from BS-English Department . I done my matriculation and F.sc both from
federal institute after my f.Sc I join this college becoming the part of English department. Commented [D1]: Put a full stop at the end of ‘institute’.

I'll to share my hobbies ,in my leasure time I like to sketch , like to do photography, and coin Commented [D2]: New sentence begins here so letter ‘a’
should be capitalized.
collection is also my one of the hobby .About my future goals I want to be part of Pakistan
Commented [D3]: Capitalize ‘f’ and put a ful stop after ‘c’.
army and secondly want to achieve challenging position elsewhere .
Commented [D4]: Use second form of the verb.
This is what I want to share about me .
Commented [D5]: Amend to read “Here are my hobbies”:
Thank you .
Commented [D6]: ‘I’ should be capitalized.
Commented [D7]: Correct spelling
Best Regards ;
Commented [D8]: Amend to read “I like to sketch and do the
Shabana Khattak photography”. Put a full stop here. Remove the comma and delete
‘and’.
FROM: Rimsha Hafeez (05/24/18)
Commented [D9]: Capitalize ‘c’.
SUBJECT: RE: Who is Who
Commented [D10]: Delete from here and insert after ‘of’.
Commented [D11]: Delete it.
Commented [D12]: Make it plural.
Commented [D13]: Insert a comma after it.
Commented [D14]: Capitalize ‘a’.
Commented [D15]: Delete it.
Commented [D16]: Capitalize ‘s’ and put a comma after
‘secondly’.
Commented [D17]: Replace it with a suitable word.