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SFL Group Assignment Dinda Setyahati Asrining Tyas K2208003 Irene Mutiara K2208021 Duwi Sulistiyowati K2208031

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My Terrible Week I was hospitalized for a week because of malaria last month. At first, I had headache, aching muscles, stomachache, and weakness. Then, I got fever, chills, loss of appetite and vomiting. I thought that I got cold, but the doctor said that I had malaria. I was afraid because people suffered from malaria can developed severe complications and die. The doctor and the nurse tried to calm me down. They said that malaria could be cured. The doctor then gave me medicine. After a week in the hospital, the doctor said that I could go home.

How it is called Recount: The purpose of recount is to retell past experience of the writer so that the writer has to be able to touch the readers heart and make them involved in the story of what happened in the past. Analysis: The text above is aimed at telling the readers his/ her experience when being hospitalized because of suffering malaria. The writer wants the reader feel what he/ she felt at that time. In order to realize the purpose, the writer use appropriate tense (past tense) and arrange it in a logical and chronological writing. The author involves mental processes so that the reader can feel the events experienced by the author well. Analysis: I was hospitalized for a week because of malaria last month. At first, I
had headache, aching muscles, stomachache, and weakness. Then, I got fever, chills, loss of appetite and vomiting. I thought that I got cold, but the doctor said that I had malaria. I was afraid because people

suffered from malaria can develop severe complications and die. The doctor and the nurse tried to calm me down. They said that malaria could be cured. The doctor then gave me medicine. After a week in the hospital, the doctor said that I could go home. *bold : past tense *Italic : mental process

Unfortunately, the text being analyzed is quite flat. It cannot bring the readers to sense what the writers feel exactly, for instance the writers pain, his/her shock toward the doctors diagnose, his/ her fear of illness, etc. It might be caused by the choices of diction which cannot strongly reveal the strong emotion felt by the writer. Instead of simply saying he/she was afraid, it might be better to dramatize the feeling by saying it in another way (example?)
I thought that I got cold, but the doctor said that I had malaria. I was afraid because people suffered from malaria can developed severe complications and die.

In the case of transitivity, actually the writer had used mental process to share his/ her feeling, but the use of diction is too flat and simple so that the writing is not that touching. Besides, we think that less cohesive devices used in this text, thus each sentence seems to stand independently. We can see this from the following example:
I was afraid because people suffered from malaria can develop severe complications and die. (missing cohesive device..) The doctor and the nurse tried to calm me down. They said that malaria could be cured. The first and second sentences strongly express different idea, even quite contrastive. Actually, in our opinion, the writer can use cohesive devices as a tool to show this contrast, for example, by using but or however. This will show readers that there is such counter-action done by other actor (in this case, the doctor and the nurse) towards the previous thing happened to the writer.

In this text, the center of the story is the writer itself. He/she is the theme of the sentence. By putting the writer as the theme, the center of attention goes to him/ her which further lead to the departure of the story. It gives such strong emphasis towards the writer as the one who experienced those events in the story. On the other hand, its also good since the writer can position the reader as the person who experiences those events. But the

theme-rheme configuration in the text is quite dynamic since there is a change where in some clauses the theme is no longer the writer but the doctor and the nurse. Its aimed to avoid monotony and boredom of the readers, moreover it also has purpose to involve other actors as the supporters of the story. Analysis: I was hospitalized for a week because of malaria last month. At first, I
had headache, aching muscles, stomachache, and weakness. Then, I got fever, chills, loss of appetite and vomiting. I thought that I got cold, but the doctor said that I had malaria. I was afraid because people suffered from malaria can developed severe complications and die. The doctor and the nurse tried to calm me down. They said that malaria could be cured. The doctor then gave me medicine. After a week in the hospital, the doctor said that I could go home.

The generic structure of recount text is orientation, event, and reorientation. In the first stage, the writer mentions the character, setting, etc. to position the reader in such condition. In the next stage, event, the occurrences are told in chronological order to help the reader imagine the event in order to make them understand about the story. The whole story has been clearly stated so the writer does not need to emphasize in reorientation.
Analysis: Orientation: I was hospitalized for a week because of malaria last month. Events : At first, I had headache, aching muscles, stomachache, and weakness. Then, I got fever, chills, loss of appetite and vomiting. I thought that I got cold, but the doctor said that I had malaria. I was afraid because people suffered from malaria can developed severe complications and die. The doctor and the nurse tried to calm me down. They said that malaria could be cured. The doctor then gave me medicine. After a week in the hospital, the doctor said that I could go home.

The writer uses simple language choices in this text. This can be seen from the sentence construction which only utilize single verb. Thus, this text is considered appropriate to the reader with intermediate level.

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