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DO NOW: Fold a piece of paper twice to make 4 quarters. Tear along folds to make 4 pieces. Write your name on each.

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Redundancy/Wordiness Review Drill - 0 Easy Level 1. That tasty meal was delicious! 2. The dress was green in color. 3. The unmarried bachelor lived with his mother. 4. The defeated army retreated back to the forest. 5. Both the two girls had short hair.

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Redundancy/Wordiness Review Drill 1 One Word - Beginner Level 1. There is no evidence to support that those new mortgages are likely to default. 2. Last month, more than 40% of featured article nominations successfully passed. 3. They invaded the coast and brought along European diseases. 4. The manager has plans to accept the offer. 5. The least accessible forested areas were the last ones to be cleared.

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Better Versions 1. There is no evidence that those new mortgages are likely to default. 2. Last month, more than 40% of featured article nominations successfully passed. 3. They invaded the coast and brought European diseases. 4. The manager plans to accept the offer. 5. The least accessible forested areas were the last to be cleared

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Redundancy/Wordiness Review Drill #2 One Word - Beginner Level - Write the sentence and cross out the unnecessary word. 1. This sudden recognition led to keen competition for Handel's future services. 2. The orbiter project, cancelled in 2005, would have specically targeted Europa, Ganymede and Callisto. 3. These two species are both members of the equine family. 4. After 1731 the opera was not staged again for more than 200 years. 5. Bruckner's Symphony No. 3 was a turning point for the composer. However, in the years following the work's premiere, he revised it several times.

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Better Versions 1. This sudden recognition led to keen competition for Handel's services. 2. The orbiter project, cancelled in 2005, would have targeted Europa, Ganymede and Callisto. 3. These species are both members of the equine family. 4. After 1731 the opera was not staged for more than 200 years. 5. Bruckner's Symphony No. 3 was a turning point for the composer. However, in the years following the premiere, he revised it several times.

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Redundancy Drill #3 - Replacement Wording (You may have to use different words). Medium Difculty 1. These ndings posed a great number of problems. 2. After the punch-up at the grand nal, the NCAA took measures to prevent major brawls from happening again. 3. In the year of 1988, there were renewed efforts to boost the government's popularity. 4. These aspects serve to distort some of the elements of the architecture, such as structure and envelope

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Better Versions 1. These ndings posed many problems. 2. After the punch-up at the grand nal, the NCAA took measures to prevent major brawls. 3. In 1988, there were renewed efforts to boost the government's popularity. 4. These aspects distort elements of the architecture, such as structure and envelope

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Redundancy Drill #4 - Replacement Wording - Medium Difculty 1. As a result of making such decisions, poker players are able to maximize their odds and win more money. 2. More than 300 million Led Zeppelin albums have been sold worldwide, including 109.5 million sales in the US alone. 3. Apart from the poets mentioned in the Kavirajamarga, later Kannada writers have referred to three poets as being eminent among their predecessors. 4. Due to problems with some of the more novel features of Bulleid's design; all members of the class were subsequently rebuilt by British Railways during the late 1950s, losing their air-smoothed casings in the process. A third of the class avoided the scrapper, and they can be seen on heritage railways throughout Great Britain.

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He contributed to research that led to the nding of a cure for malaria.

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Better Versions 1. By making such decisions, poker players maximize their odds and win more money. 2. More than 300 million Led Zeppelin albums have been sold worldwide, including 109.5 million in the US. 3. Apart from the poets mentioned in the Kavirajamarga, later Kannada writers have referred to three as eminent among their predecessors. 4. Due to problems with some of the more novel features of Bulleid's design; all members of the class were rebuilt by British Railways during the late 1950s, losing their air-smoothed casings. A third of the class avoided the scrapper, and can be seen on heritage railways throughout Great Britain. 5. He contributed to research that led to a cure for malaria.

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Wordiness/Redundancy Drill #5 - Expert Level 1. The end of ship-building had an enduring effect throughout the existence of imperial China. 2. The majority of critics gave the lm negative reviews. 3. The territory's path of evolution has been a challenge for the government. 4. Sport is a compulsory activity for all students; teams usually have training two times a week. 5. During a complex history, four local communities have tried to become the capital over the years.

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Better Versions 1.The end of ship-building had an enduring effect on imperial China. 2. Most critics gave the lm negative reviews. 3. The territory's evolution has been a challenge for the government. 4. Sport is compulsory for all students; teams usually train two times a week. 5. During a complex history, four local communities have tried to become the capital.

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Wordiness/Redundancy Drill #6 - Expert Level 1. Since the beginning of its inception, the band always enjoyed success in the marketplace. 2. She was able to sense and detect whether her mother was happy or sad. 3. It was extremely crucial and necessary to check the weather conditions prior to leaving and going on our trip. 4. Due to the fact that I knew Latisha, in my own personal opinion, she was very smart. 5. I parked my car in near proximity to the grocery store. Better Version 1. The band was successful from its beginning. 2. She was able to sense her mothers mood. 3. It was necessary to check the weather before leaving on our trip.

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4. I knew Latisha, and in my opinion, she is very smart. 5. I parked my car near the grocery store.

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Wordiness/Redundancy Drill #7 - Master Level 1. At this point in time, it is within the realm of possibility that we will be allowed to go to the movie. 2. It would be advisable to nish your work before you ask your mom permission. 3. He has the ability to run a mile in less than ve minutes at this point in time. 4. He has the ability to run a mile in less than ve minutes due to the fact that he has trained in some cases seven days a week. 5. It is within the realm of possibility that he will win the meet in my own personal opinion.

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Better 1.Now we might be allowed to go to the movie. 2. You should nish your work before you ask permission from your mom. 3. He can run a mile in under ve minutes now. 4. He can run a mile in under ve minutes because he sometimes trained seven days a week. 5. I believe he might win the meet.

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Wordiness/Redundancy Drill #8 - Master Level 1. In a period of four days, he summarized briey all the information on the surrounding circumtances. 2. The box was square in shape and was of smaller in size than the one I saw prior to that day. 3. The students were all completely unanimous and were willing to cooperate together with each and every one. 4. The dogs were enclosed within the pen that was in close proximity to the barn. 5. The biography of her life the important essentials in spite of the fact that she did not cooperate with the author.

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Better 1.In four days, he summarized the information on the circumstances. 2.The box was square and smaller than the one I saw previously. 3.The students were unanimous and were cooperative with each other. 4. The dogs were in the pen that was close to the barn. 5. Her biography included the essentials, although she did not cooperate with the author.

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Wordiness/Redundancy Drill #9 Ultimate Grand Supreme Royal King/ Queen Level 1. It is important for persons to read the notes, advice and information detailed opposite and then complete all sections of the form prior to its immediate return to the agency via the envelope provided. 2. At this point in time, our time schedules do not allow or permit further or additional work tasks. 3. Notwithstanding the fact that these early findings provide some promise, state officials recognize that more information is needed with respect to an understanding of the long-term effects of welfare reform on families. 4. Staff members at all levels and in all areas possess the knowledge that our purpose and goal is to help consumers in the attainment of their needs.

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5. In spite of the fact that the educational environment is a very significant facet to each and every one of our children, some groups do not support reasonable and fair tax assessments that are required for providing an educational experience at a high level of quality.

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Better 1. Please read the information, ll out the form completely, and then send it back as soon as possible in the envelope provided. 2.Our schedules are full! Or - We do not have enough time to perform additional work. 3. Because the preliminary ndings were promising, state ofcials want more information to understand the long-term effects of welfare reform on families 4. All staff knows our purpose is to help consumers attain their needs. 5. Although schools are important to all of our children, some groups do not support the fair and necessary tax assessments required for a quality education.

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1. The students were instructed to behave and conduct themselves in such a way as to show respect to those who were in charge. 2. At this point in time, we do not have sufcient numbers of students to make arrangements to rent a bus. 3. High-quality learning environments are a necessary precondition for facilitation and enhancement of the ongoing learning process. 4. Information theory is a branch of practical, applied mathematics and engineering having to do with the quantication of data and information. 5. Historically in the past, students in this learning environment were unwilling and reluctant to participate in testing designed to determine their eligibility for college admission.

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Better 1. The students were instructed to behave respectfully towards their superiors. 2. Currently we do not have enough students to rent a bus. Currently, we need more students to rent a bus. 3. Good schools enable students to learn more. 4. Information theory is a branch of applied mathematics and engineering involving the quantication of information. 5. Previously, students at North Panola were reluctant to take the ACT.

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